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0 posted 2001-06-20 04:09 PM


Spanish Moss

Deep, buried deep down, dark, dank, ground
musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down,
a treasured chest, buried alone, call it home,
buried deep down, where thoughts ne’er roam.

Within cavernous wood and green ironed lock
lie undisturbed pink silk of young girl’s frock,
amidst linen doll, ball of yarn, a lonesome key;
lies deep, dark, dank, the hidden heart of thee.

With the razing of the land, hands uncover
treasured chest, left alone after loss of lover;
discounted, forgotten moments unburied now
come again to grips with sunlight’s vow.

For sunlight saw forbidden love high above,
tears fallen, curses rambled, treasured chest shoved
deep, buried deep down, dark, dank, ground
musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down.

Perhaps a hundred or more years ago
a lover loved, lost, despaired so;
then treasured chest carried there
once buried deep, dark, bereft of air;

…with only Spanish moss to mourn.

17 January, 2000
©KRJ



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1 posted 2001-06-20 06:02 PM


glad you reposted..I enjoyed this a great deal for both the images and the flow..

good work here..and worth being revisited

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2 posted 2001-06-20 06:50 PM


With the razing of the land, hands uncover
treasured chest, left alone after loss of lover;
discounted, forgotten moments unburied now
come again to grips with sunlight’s vow.

For sunlight saw forbidden love high above,
tears fallen, curses rambled, treasured chest shoved
deep, buried deep down, dark, dank, ground
musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down.
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love the mystic, haunted feel of this...
wonderful imagery here Lady Sun...and cadence
well done  

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

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3 posted 2001-06-20 07:26 PM


Karilea,

Some wonderful imagery in this one.

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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