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Lady In White
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0 posted 2001-06-20 02:29 PM


The Real of It

my watch says
you’re thinking of me
my heart tells me
it’s true
and swift comes the
time
when I am next
to you

so I sit quiet and solemnly feel
how the whole is
in the real

and experience strange
thoughts as they brew
and come to me
as soft
as
dew

                                ~*~

this day is one of quietude
and soft as not to interlude
‘pon the silence of
my exude….

strange…the quiet of this
fog,
the warmth of day
‘neath skies of gray
the inner heat of
my soul
meets the outer
heat controlled
the numbers must be
as one
there is no cool, nor
over-warm
just a sense of surreal
from this norm

in the calm, if your finger
were to touch
my arm
the fog of day would
let you melt
into my skin

and I would
allow you in

there is no cold
there is no over-warm
the air and I are
one
only my skin is
holding thoughts in

                              ~*~

my watch says
you’re thinking of me
my heart tells me
it’s true
and swift comes the
time
when I am next
to you

so I sit quiet and solemnly feel
how the whole is
in the real

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2001-06-20 02:31 PM


That's the ABC of it.
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2 posted 2001-06-20 02:53 PM


Darn i need to get a new watch.  Oh yea kids gave me one for father's day..  Maybe the new watch will tell me all this.

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Bernie Slicker

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3 posted 2001-06-20 03:09 PM


A very delicate touch to this poem...beautifully written...
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4 posted 2001-06-20 03:55 PM


"only my skin is
holding thoughts in"

I've felt this way before.  I enjoyed this very much.

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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5 posted 2001-06-21 12:46 PM


May I say,

excellent work...

regards,
sudhir

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6 posted 2001-06-21 01:05 PM


I believe I will echo all...

very nicely done indeed...


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7 posted 2001-06-21 01:25 PM


"the fog of day would
let you melt
into my skin"

Beautiful thoughts...

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8 posted 2001-06-21 04:34 PM


My watch says it time to go BTTT.  Such a fantastic piece.
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9 posted 2001-06-21 04:48 PM


Superb!!!

I especially felt the power of this section:

     in the calm, if your finger
     were to touch
     my arm
     the fog of day would
     let you melt
     into my skin


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10 posted 2001-06-21 06:09 PM


Very, very lovely.

Corinne

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