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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-06-20 09:05 AM



In runnels,
Trickling dripping
Channels  
Awakened to possible
Flow.

Soundings
Of rough grain shingled
Resistance fill ears
And head in this
Down poured storm

Chaotic ballet
Of crazy thoughts
Bouncing hailstone hard
Add staccato rhythm
To floods
Released

No lightening flashed
Insight,
but thunder
Begins
deep inside

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1 posted 2001-06-20 09:17 AM


Wonderful use of some old words....runnels....chaotic.....staccato....

they clip right along!  Like this, I do!

RSWells
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2 posted 2001-06-20 09:39 AM


Hope you felt better in this secret storm's passing.
Dark Enchantress
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3 posted 2001-06-20 12:27 PM


No lightening flashed
Insight,
but thunder
Begins
deep inside

That was my favorite part, but it was all great. Very interesting.

"...if you want love you must be love.."
Billy Corgan, Smashing Pumpkins

Freedom comes when you learn to live unafraid.

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Deep in the heart
4 posted 2001-06-20 12:29 PM


Written with acumen my friend  
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5 posted 2001-06-20 12:30 PM


Chaotic ballet
Of crazy thoughts
Bouncing hailstone hard
Add staccato rhythm
To floods
Released
=========================

this is very cool...
great use of vocabulary and imagery.
unique and clever writing.
well done  

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

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6 posted 2001-06-21 03:46 PM


A grim warning sign.  Nicely done. BTTT with this one.
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