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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2001-06-20 08:36 AM


Strawberry Fields

If you don't like me get lost.
If you don't care for me
don't even stop to count the cost.
If my presence is not required
and this is all in vain
don't waste anymore of my time
it will only delay the pain.
Kiss me my final goodbye because I already
know it doesn't hurt for long to cry.
Take one last look and if
your eyeballs are not fulfilled
why waste anymore time together.
Looks like this one won't be
strawberry field's forever.
Most likely strawberry field's
of displeasure.

Jameslee@June20,2001


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Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-06-20 08:56 AM


nicely said... enjoyed the word play and the ending..a bit of a different twist..

good work...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2001-06-20 10:00 AM


James,
I have a pot of strawberrys. Enjoyed

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
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3 posted 2001-06-20 10:45 AM


Oh, my, if only we could speak so powerfully and succinctly when faced with the type of things that would prompt such a response.  This is extremely well done and I enjoyed the read greatly!!!
JLR
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4 posted 2001-06-20 10:53 AM


Well, that's certainly putting it on the table...enjoyed!
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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5 posted 2001-06-20 10:55 AM


James you've got the honesty heart out and writing today....I thought this was very forceful.

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

Fancy
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since 2001-06-05
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TN/USA
6 posted 2001-06-20 05:36 PM


...a great display of strength in pain...very difficult to achieve in feelings, not to mention words...very nice
walker
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Florida
7 posted 2001-06-21 01:20 PM


No chocolate in this strawberries, well said!
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