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Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
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0 posted 2001-06-20 06:30 AM



Seven Years

Broken, the glass
once hanging on wall.
She had tried to walk through it
body and all.
Shards mixed with cuts,
the red flowing bright
seven bad years, would
begin on that night.
An unreturned love,
a family death,
stolen from dreams
her pulsing, her breath.
Wondering now what
the last 3 shall bring,
when the broken chips hanging
as chimes, breeze their ring.
Rainbows of singsong
sometimes paint her view,
but Alicethruglass sees
only what's true.

~A~



© Copyright 2001 Alicethruglass - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2001-06-20 06:46 AM


Very interesting, I like very much  

Maree

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-06-20 07:52 AM


vivid stark imagery, with a unique perspective and theme.
clever and creative writing.
welcome to Passions Alice
nice to have you here.  
take care
jm

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Lady In White
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3 posted 2001-06-20 08:54 AM


Sounds as if you are four years into mending...

we certainly hope you find some solace here, through wonderful poetry, and better friends.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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4 posted 2001-06-20 12:00 PM


Nothing lasts forever!   You know what I mean......and a drink of cool water will cleanse your soul no matter how you finally get it.....there's always sunshine after rain!
Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
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5 posted 2001-06-21 04:55 AM


Dark Angel-thank you  

Janet Marie-Thank you for your welcome and comments.

Lady In White-Four years and counting.Thank you.

ethome-and all those other cliches, thank you

~A~


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