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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2001-06-18 10:05 PM


“Tell me your dreams of last night.”

There’s a blackness of under,
Underground, without sound,
Shallow earth will slow smother,
Soon comes hell, in earth smell;
Till the only noise that pounds
Is the final beats of heart,
Then there is that bell that sounds,
And the nightmare falls apart;
A cold sweat and all’s wet,
I’ve waken before the flames,
Before calling out the names.

There’s a blackness of under,
Undercover hiding well.

Gloom



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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-06-19 12:46 PM


PG...not sure if my take on this is correct, but I've had enough nightmares to feel my fingers tremble and that misty sweat above my lips and on my forehead. Dreams seem to be a theme lately with you, so I wish you sweet ones!
Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2001-06-19 07:52 AM


Thank you, serenity,
For the kind words in response

Gloom

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3 posted 2001-06-19 08:46 AM


enjoyed the sounds and the images...nice word play and capturing of sureal in a concrete form..

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