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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2001-06-18 11:23 AM



A Day Lost in Tomorrow


I have no voice, words have been stolen,
stored within a feverish mind.
Aching, wishing to forego weakness
for strength of conviction, head forward
resting in hands, holding pain.

Constricting thoughts, hardly swallowed,
as coolness drips slowly
down the passageway, trying to soothe.
Gravity pulling shoulders, inward, tensing,
muscles not wishing to obey.

A day lost in tomorrow.

Ears ringing impatience, a day or few
away from Summer, yet the Wynter
has been fueled by the heat of tightness,
from the virus that burns her outer layer.
Wanting relief, to find in today, a way
to be able to still, the silence of her life.

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



© Copyright 2001 Wynter Bliss - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2001-06-18 11:29 AM


Wanting relief, to find in today, a way
to be able to still, the silence of her life
....

Amazing...

great work...

regards,
sudhir

"I was born intelligent - education ruined me"

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2001-06-18 11:36 AM


Nakd,
Take a flight, take a trip, have a drink, take a sip. Do anything but flip. Give me a smile. Sy

VAS
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3 posted 2001-06-18 12:22 PM


This is a powerful piece, I hope you're feeling better very soon.  Your title has my head going off in a somewhat different direction and if I catch up to it, I may write a poem on the vein in which it seems to be taking.  
Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2001-06-18 03:30 PM


as usual your images and words are well painted... hope the tightness... quickly goes...


serenity blaze
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5 posted 2001-06-18 03:55 PM


Wow...this is by far one of the most intimate things I've read from you! Excellent portrayal of one tortured by their own thoughts---very impressed with this piece!
Interloper
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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2001-06-18 04:33 PM


Well, hmmmmmmmmmm, done.  Must be the humidity down there  
ethome
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7 posted 2001-06-18 06:17 PM


Great writing Wynter!   Of course that's what I expect!   like this thought

                "Wanting relief, to find in today, a way
                 to be able to still, the silence of her life."

Sven
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8 posted 2001-06-18 06:35 PM


total revealing of thoughts here Wynter. . .

well done. . .  

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

vandana
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9 posted 2001-06-18 06:40 PM


liked it
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
10 posted 2001-06-19 07:02 PM


Thank you friends, yesterday I woke with the flu, sore throat, no voice (oh my! that's as  bad as having the aching fingers that wouldn't allow me to type), and the rest of me in feverish pain. This evening I am able to thank you for responding, the aching body is calming down allowing me to type and think, but I still have no voice *s...be glad these aren't audios..*s

oh and for those who read other things into this..my secret..yes, I have days lost in my thoughts of tomorrow by not being able to accomplish some things I needed to do...oh well..I always enjoy when you find something more meaningful in my words

~smiles
Wynter


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 06-19-2001).]

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