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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-06-17 08:55 AM


Rewrite:

        Thoughts in the night

Each day we weave a subtle thread.
A slender thread within our head.
This thread may hang us from a post
Or serve us glories road of host.

Our breath makes dance the canopy,
Makes nuance of the things we see.
Extracted from the ebb and flow
Exacting things we wish to know.

The web evolves shread by shread.
It is our bed our water shed.
But all the treasures that are sown,
Are blown away like dust is blown.

Each seed tried and tied to plight
Lights the soul a candles light.
But time moves in leaps and bounds
As ravens perch the trees around.

With constant wonder of the deed.
We live and die and birth new seed.
A process we call genesis
And often named a nemesis

We pay each day a living toll
But are not privy of the goal.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-06-17 09:00 AM


..."...often named a nemesis..."

yes
yes
yes
yes
yes!

Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2001-06-17 09:38 AM


Bowing to you, Master Poet
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-06-17 09:56 AM


Sunshine,
Thank you and glad you agree. *L*

Elizabeth,
Please start putting your poems in book form
and I'll buy the first book, signed of course. Love sy

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-06-17 10:10 AM


Seymour~

'Our breath makes dance the canopy,
Makes nuance of the things we see.
Extracted from the ebb and flow
Exacting things we wish to know.'


You are just a dadgum GOOD poet ! !
Happy Father's Day to you !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-06-17 10:14 AM


Marge,
Thank you for the dadgum and happy fathers day. love ya Sy

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2001-06-17 10:41 AM


The web evolves shread by shread.
It is our bed our water shed.
But all the treasures that are sown,
Are blown away like dust is blown.


Each seed tried and tied to plight
Lights the soul a candles light.
But time moves in leaps and bounds
As ravens perch the trees around.

With constant wonder of the deed.
We live and die and birth new seed.
A process we call genesis
And often named a nemesis


We pay each day a living toll
But are not privy of the goal.
===================================

Reading you is just way too cool
words of wisdom ... the golden rule
Lessons of life penned in perfect rhyme
prophecies handed down thru time

We grow when you share your thoughts in the night
For in your words we witness your wisdom's light


Happy Fathers Day sweet Stinky
*winkiewinkie*  
love ya, Tinkerbell  

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-06-17 10:45 AM


From the internal rhymes to the beautiful flow ... much enjoyed Seymour!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

VAS
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8 posted 2001-06-17 10:53 AM


Like it all but the 1st and last stanza I really like!...I like the part about the canopy and about the dance, too.  Oh, gee, thanks for sharing your 'night thoughts'!
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-06-17 11:04 AM


JM,
Thank you for the happy fathers day and your ever glowing comments. Love ya Sy

Kit,
Thank you my friend.

VAS,
I'll share my night thoughts with you anytime. LOL

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