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Thresholds... The Walk With You
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Thresholds... The Walk With You |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I got my chorus from your walk You know just how the angels talk That is how I fell for you I saw the step was in you too I was at the cliff when you leapt Staring straight and softly wept Could my tears have brought you back You walk the earth in threads of black I see you as I pen a dirge And to the cliff I have an urge The salty air of tears and loss Thresholds seen as ones to cross You said I wrote far too much Maybe even lost my touch You know just how the angels talk I stole my chorus from your walk [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-17-2001).] |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yanno this was an excellent poem - and I really liked your approach in this one, speaking as an onlooker. Enjoyed. ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them as tomorrow may never come ~*~ |
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Eye Junior Member
since 2001-06-10
Posts 28Outside Looking In |
to observe is to assimialate, to assimilate wth discretion is said to be the root of wisdom. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Quite the poem Walt. I love the insight into yourself in this! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Wanted to show my gratitude thank you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ These thoughts in verse are such as to make the heart sigh ! How wonderfully you have stretched and grown in your writing. I really am enjoying this one soooooo much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...I stole my chorus from your walk... How very, very poetically beautiful... a "masterpiece" line... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful write, Walt. Very original.  All writing comes |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh you...what a beautiful poem...you amaze me with your humour...but when you write passion...I am in awe.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is lovely Walty, I enjoyed m'friend Maree |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
WayoutWalt you did well. |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
"ah lahk it ah lahht," especially the lines: I was at the cliff when you leapt ... And to the cliff I have an urge and I got my chorus from your walk ... I stole my chorus from your walk ...quite faxn8ing... |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I got my chorus from your walk You know just how the angels talk ..... ..... I was at the cliff when you leapt Staring straight and softly wept Could my tears have brought you back You walk the earth in threads of black ******************** I got my chorus from your walk......quite a beautiful line......... I have just loved the whole poem but this line is awesome........ Thank you ************************ It's only me.......only me I hope that would suffice eternally {{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}} [This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 06-20-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I wanted to thank you all for the kind words o yuh!!!! |
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