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insect
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0 posted 2001-06-17 12:25 PM




Would you come a little bit closer and sit right next to me

Let’s take a little adventure to the midnight land and sea

Flying through the heavens in this sky of distant stars

Cruise on invisible ships and transparent flying cars

A visit to an alien world of a cosmic fantasyland

Laying on their beaches with three moons and purple sand

Watch their water glitter from the reflection of glowing trees

Witness nocturnal pollination from blinking bumblebees

Everything in the night illuminates to be seen

Even our sandy footprints show a glow from where we’ve been

Every living creature has an aura of radiant light

Showing it’s glowing love in this world of only night

Would you come a little bit closer and sit right next to me

Let’s cast out from this land of love and sail out to sea

Follow fluorescent dolphins through an ocean mist of light

Gliding with a song they sing out every night

Singing all their love to this world of night and glow

A song that draws your heart when you hear it you have to go

Every note of love is pleasing to the ears

Such a wonderful lovely sound it brings out joyful tears

Your heart is filled with love from the songs the dolphins sing

Encouraging your own felt love so you decide to present the ring

Darling you know I love you as we float on love and sea

I’ve taken you a million miles my love will you marry me




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1 posted 2001-06-17 12:30 PM


what a lovely fantasy ride

and what a surprising ending

is this a poem you're using soon???

1slick_lady
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2 posted 2001-06-17 12:32 PM


insect...so sweet...sounds like a great world...helen
Eye
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3 posted 2001-06-17 12:54 PM


a very pleasant picture painted.

Poeminister
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4 posted 2001-06-17 01:02 AM


Wonderful, vivid imagery.  Nicely done.
Dark Angel
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5 posted 2001-06-17 01:44 AM


great imagery and especially loved the "Purple Sand" nice picture  

Maree

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6 posted 2001-06-17 04:34 AM


I loved the images, great work.

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them as tomorrow may never come ~*~

Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-06-17 06:11 AM


This was enchanting Insect! I found myself smiling throughout, picturing three moons and blinking bumblebees ... wonderfully descriptive tale, and such a surprise ending! I really enjoyed this!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

ethome
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8 posted 2001-06-17 06:41 AM


This is one of the most fabulous proposals I have ever read!  Write on!
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9 posted 2001-06-18 09:14 AM


YES!!!!!!! oh YES!!!!
uhhhh......I mean..... .......wow!  
I love this......fantastic fantasy, with such a romantic ending....*sigh*.....Lois likes  

Amature2
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since 2001-01-08
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10 posted 2001-06-18 09:41 AM


Insect, what a wonderful place this is, a place where

"everything in the night illuminates to be seen
even our sandy footprints show a glow from where we've been
every living creature has an aura of radiant light
showing it's glowing love in this world of only night"

Very Nice Insect.

[This message has been edited by Amature2 (edited 06-18-2001).]

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