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FireDancer123
Junior Member

since 2001-06-14

Posts 43
Virginia

0 posted 2001-06-15 03:30 PM

Everything is lonely when I think about you.
No more flings or friendship.
No more conversation.

Everything turns gray when I think about you.
The colors fade on instant,
Blurring in my confusion.

Everything lies when I think about you.
I become this pessimist,
Drawn to quick suspicions.

Everything dies when I think about you.
Life ceases to exist
Among my depression.

So I pause for a moment,
Every minute or so,
When I think about you,
And the lies you still tell.

"If you've never stared off into the distance, then your life is a shame." - Adam Duritz
"Nothing is either good or bad, but thinking makes it so." -

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-06-15 03:39 PM

sad... but lies and hurt seem to go together..and do indeed drain the color from the world around us..

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-06-15 03:41 PM

When it hurts this much to think...perhaps you should dance, instead. Be well.

Cuddlez
Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 422
Walla Walla, WA 99362

3 posted 2001-06-15 06:23 PM

Sad indeed when a colorful world turns gray

Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

FoxXena
Member

since 2001-06-13

Posts 141
where dragons play, children run free and foxes are never hunted

4 posted 2001-06-15 06:35 PM

*sniffles* a very powerful piece of writing. I love it.

Would you be known by everybody? Then you know nobody.
-Publilus Syrus

[This message has been edited by FoxXena (edited 06-15-2001).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2001-06-15 06:51 PM

I liked and relate to the ending best

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-06-15 08:03 PM

been there...been there once, it is painful.

"This rose has seen red, I have been blue
I'm going to Ireland in 2002!" Kathleen.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-06-15 08:12 PM

FireDancer~
Welcome to Passions.
Deep emotions penned nicely.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

EldoradoCentury
New Member

since 2001-06-08

Posts 4
A Dream Within A Dream

8 posted 2001-06-15 10:20 PM

You do move the reader. And of course the pragmatic alternative, left brain speaking- think about something or someone else. Is that not the easiest thing to say. And yet often nto only hard, a seeming impossibility. Yet writing is catharsis. Well done.

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