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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-06-15 10:11 AM


Rewrite:

             Sway of the Wind

Seeds of change within persist
As winds of nature dance in twist.
Play in space and base in grace,
Root their time in full embrace.

Without arms it does the deed,
Weighs and drops the carried seed.
Within a paradox of blend,
Where sinks the roots until its end.

Wind, the artist of the core,
Paints the canvas green with awe.
Beyond imaginations ken,
Creating, primal Edens den.

The garden of the apple seed
The garden of our Adams deed
The garden where the wind has sown,
The garden that the wind has blown.

It's here we pray confession,
Amongst the winds discretion?


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SEA
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1 posted 2001-06-15 10:14 AM


ohhhh Seymour....   I like this very much  
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2 posted 2001-06-15 10:15 AM


This literally dances...and what a partner, "Thought"....

what a dance, indeed....

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-06-15 12:30 PM


Sea,
Thank you sweet.

Sunshine,
Thank you my ever faithful one. *L*

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4 posted 2001-06-15 07:06 PM


Wind, the artist of the core,
Paints the canvas green with awe.
Beyond imaginations ken,
Creating, primal Edens den.

The garden of the apple seed
The garden of our Adams deed
The garden where the wind has sown,
The garden that the wind has blown.

It's here we pray confession,
Amongst the winds discretion?
====================================

your poetic winds ching me chimes
and your rhymes ring me bells
*ww*  
me

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-06-15 07:11 PM


JM,
And you are my Tinker Bell. I knew it was you that brought this back from the grave.
So now I am your slave. Winkiewinkie Stinky

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6 posted 2001-06-15 08:08 PM


Seymour~
The entire piece is captivating -
but this is ...... stunning~

'Without arms it does the deed,
Weighs and drops the carried seed.
Within a paradox of blend,
Where sinks the roots until its end.'


How eloquent, dear poet.
~*Marge*~

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Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-06-15 08:16 PM


Beautiful Seymour .. you carry such a wonderful rhythm throughout this lovely piece, very much enjoyed as always!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-15-2001).]

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2001-06-15 11:38 PM


Marge,
An eloquent comment from an eloquent lady. *L*

Kit,
I thank you twice. LOL

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