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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-06-14 12:10 PM

It’s dark outside…
And inside too…
Won’t you lean a bit closer
as I whisper words to you?

That’s it…Closer still,
For the things I will say
Are spoken for your heart
It’s much better done that way.

Let the Shadows slowly seep
Into the fabric of your life,
As they carry with them
The struggle and the strife.

I love the way they trouble you
and a quiet mind do cloud,
For darkness is my habitat
Shadows just my shroud

Join me in this journey
And embrace the flow of tears,
Take my hand as I lead you
Into this land of fears

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-06-14 12:12 PM

casting about insecurities....a good, frightening read....

IWithinYou
Junior Member

since 2001-06-14

Posts 21
Within You

2 posted 2001-06-14 12:21 PM

Ah..........very very well done. Insecurity does tempt just so.

The syrup runs thickly to cover all.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

3 posted 2001-06-14 12:30 PM

Cpat...i know this place well...helen

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

4 posted 2001-06-14 03:21 PM

love the way they trouble you
and a quiet mind do cloud,
For darkness is my habitat
Shadows just my shroud

Join me in this journey
And embrace the flow of tears,
Take my hand as I lead you
Into this land of fears

----------------------

oh......what an invitation?
and what a journey?

I doubt that anyone hasn't been there or had a taste of it..........

Thank you
**************************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

5 posted 2001-06-14 03:31 PM

wow...gotta say I have enjoyed reading you today.....this is done with tenderness and an understanding of the weakness that plague us all...well most of us anyway.....guess there are a few who deny insecurities

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

6 posted 2001-06-14 03:33 PM

i love how you drew me closer o yuh

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2001-06-14 03:53 PM

A bit scary, nails the way our fears are all consuming.

One tiny nit:

"and a quiet mind do cloud,"

should that be "does" - for singular "a quiet mind?"

Corinne

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2001-06-14 04:01 PM

Thanks to everyone for the comments!!!

Corrine... you may be right..I was using do instead of does with the idea it wasn't refering to the singular mind but to refer to the "They" as plural... they do trouble
they do cloud....

I love the way they trouble you
and a quiet mind do cloud,
For darkness is my habitat
Shadows just my shroud

my grammer is not the best ...so now i'll have to do some research and see if I can't understand how it should actually be.

I appreciate the comment and welcome future ones!!!

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