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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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undulating waves on waves in land's demise every thought a brush of broom in sweep of all the things I tried. Every tear a shadow's eye every thought an exit's gloom carrying a clause of cost where is the door that keeps my room? where is my heart in pieces breaking confetti... of my past forsaking all my challenges to be-- somehow? It is-- somehow? It's ME. Dancing shadows partner's glove Lonliness-- alone--in love. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I tried to reply to this awhile ago - but was at school and the puteys crashed there... I can hear the sad dear...I can hear the sad...and you write it so well - is that perhaps not sad also? beautiful writing... (ps - lonliness = loneliness) love ya  K |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like that........ "where is my heart in pieces breaking confetti... of my past forsaking all my challenges to be--" That's they way it's supposed to be but things don't always work out and there is loneliness in love! Oh, Celeste, good stuff! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The worst kind of lonely is to be alone with someone as opposed to being alone with yourself.... very strong feeling throughout this piece.. I enjoyed the read |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
 love this one,it is great.. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I have perfected this in my own life! Loved this one dear. |
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