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Honeybee
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0 posted 2001-06-12 11:10 PM


Rose Of Sorrow

They call her Rose, spellbounding, so fair
Lolita of desire, Venus so rare
with sensual skin of ivory cream
a goddess of fantasy, sent from a dream
adorned with flowing locks of raven hair
and bewitching eyes of sapphire stare
at dawn of light, lashes curl to the sky
yet, at night's dance, her reflection does cry,
men wish to taste her, damsels long to steal such beauty
blind admiration...they know not of her insanity,
in this game of worth, she plays the pawn
an enchanting duckling, void of inner swan,
her skin of remembrance bears the stain
of the cry in sorrow, blooming in shame
imprisoned by walls of superficial misery
scorned by afflictions of stale drudgery,
her mask shows the smile...conceals the woe
at the sting of her kiss, love refuses to grow
her heart is cold below her chest...
no milk of life within her breast,
a mirror of sores, infected by years
drowning in the howl of infested tears,
poisoned by the pain of unending regret
aspirations annulled...suffocation of repent,
yesterday is gone, as is tomorrow
today is empty, twisted and hollow,
'neath exotic illusion, her face is scarred -
an ugly spirit, molested and marred,
men wish to taste her, damsels long to steal such beauty
blind admiration...they know not of her insanity -
this temptress of lust, Aphrodite so rare
lost in the haze of bitter, blank stare,
below the grace of painted face, lies thorns of a crone
sometimes a rose is just another weed...wilting, alone
with purity of soul, long ago deceased
at masquerade of night, she sees only the beast

~By Melissa Honeybee~


© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 2001-06-12 11:52 PM


you did this so well yuh I liked this way alot and thats big on my meter
Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-06-13 12:34 PM


her skin of remembrance bears the stain
of the cry in sorrow, blooming in shame
imprisoned by walls of superficial misery
scorned by afflictions of stale drudgery,
her mask shows the smile...conceals the woe
at the sting of her kiss, love refuses to grow
her heart is cold below her chest...
no milk of life within her breast,
a mirror of sores, infected by years
drowning in the howl of infested tears,
poisoned by the pain of unending regret
aspirations annulled...suffocation of repent,
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Melis...few ever write emotions with such
sheer depth of ache...
you blew me away with this....
and your presentation is a perfect accent to the poems powerful emote of images.
very well done poetess MHB  
take care

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

JLR
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3 posted 2001-06-13 12:42 PM


I'm not sure what to say...momentarily speechless.  I've been and also known this woman.  You have written her well!
Poeminister
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4 posted 2001-06-13 02:56 AM


A rose isn't always a rose...  
Excellent writing.

Poeminister

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
5 posted 2001-06-13 08:32 AM




This is sooooo touching an dbeautiful
I'm seized with such a heavy feeling after reading it ........and the use of pictures have made it all the more engaging......

Thank you
*********************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

Charisma
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6 posted 2001-06-13 08:36 AM


*wow*....what a beautiful heart touched words have you here...stunning.

Charisma

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2001-06-13 10:02 AM


Melissa,
Very sensitive write. I believe it is possible but not of you. Excellent poem.

Honeybee
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8 posted 2001-06-13 08:03 PM



Thank you all!!!, I am very honoured that a particular few replied to this poem and were moved by it's meaning  

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9 posted 2001-06-14 09:36 PM


now, this is powerful writing Melissa, it just grabs the reader from beginning to end, the story that it tells is excellent, and your choice of word and metaphor is superb. . .

it's one of the best things that you've written. . . superb my friend. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Gentle Spirit
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10 posted 2001-06-14 10:18 PM


Melissa~ I'm speechless!!  Truly incredible....*s*  

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

Honeybee
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11 posted 2001-06-16 09:58 PM



Sven and Gentle Spirit - Thank you so much!

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12 posted 2002-03-23 07:56 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Melissa, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all those who feel this pain deep inside that others fail to see and I pray they can all openly express themselves and understand that they are not beasts but true beauties of great worth and love! (kiss on cheek) This is sensitive and beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautfiul heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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