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0 posted 2001-06-12 02:17 PM



From atop the trees
It is easy to see
Approaching intruders
And Raven sits
Waiting to raise alarm

Once upon a time
When the world was
Still younger than
Memory, all spirits
Spoke to each other
In beautiful voices

One day they met
And discussed how
To divide the world
Their pleading like
Songs on the wind
Until…

No agreements could
Be reached among the tribes
So they began to fight

Raven was fierce
And painted himself black
With ashes from his
Slain enemies
So he could hide in shadow
To ambush the unwary

As days passed
Many were killed
And Raven grew darker
Until he was hit in the throat
By an arrow.

Having lost his beautiful voice
He grieved as in fear
He avoided all others
But his own.

Now he sits atop trees
Watching for intruders
Waiting to raise a raucous alarm
And flee intruders

How much like you
And me

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1 posted 2001-06-12 02:26 PM


Yanno...you tell the kind of tales, I feel I should be sitting on the floor while you are in a chair just expounding whatever came into your head, and trust me outside of the floor, here I am...another wonderful, wonderful tale, thank you.

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2 posted 2001-06-12 02:30 PM


What a neat story!  Thank you for sharing it with us.  Wonderful write!

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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3 posted 2001-06-12 02:32 PM


I spent some time in my younger days reading and studying native american beliefs... the way the tales were told is something I have tried to emulate from time to time, passing the kernals of what ever truth or wisdom in a story that tells why things are as they are.... no one needs spend time at my feet or on the floor, but they need to simply look around themselves to find the stories that are there...simply waiting to be heard and put on paper.

Thank you for the nice words... I do have a few other such stories I will share in time..
but just like the idea of listening to the stories tell themsleves so too does the time tell us when..

Thanks again!!


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4 posted 2001-06-12 02:37 PM


This is terrific! I loved everything about this!  
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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-06-12 02:54 PM


Nice tale.
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6 posted 2001-06-12 03:13 PM


Loved the path of history in this. Yes, it is sad that we are always to be on defensive, in fear of each other. Seems as though over the centuries, things should have swung in the opposite direction.

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7 posted 2001-06-12 06:29 PM


Very nice write.

"We also know how cruel the truth often is, and we wonder whether delusion is not more consoling."- Henri Poincare (1854-1912)

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