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esclandre
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since 2001-06-11

Posts 62
Northern California

0 posted 2001-06-11 06:44 PM

                           it forms.
cornering one eyelid like a strangler,
  sneaking up in the dark alleyways of remembrance…
                strike!
       bubbling,
    crusting the edges of peace with hazy shades of misery
it catches the sunlight of optimism
      – focuses it into a pale
mist of heartache clamming up
     …to bypass pain.
oceans, see, are careless when wandering.
                    salt and brine
waters borne from the eerie depths
                of repentance
       struggle to overwhelm contentment
    in the form of dream and desire

amazing,
      how one memory can cause such a rush
of tears…
          anguish…
                   longing…
amazing,
      how one night can play the previous
like an implement of hesitation on the path to redemption.
miraculous that I survive one dream to the next,
when each threatens to emaciate my humour,
to hasten the demise of a colourful future
which was once imprinted with promise.

tears purge,
    cascading down wrinkles of experience
    like a river chasing away winter,
they heal the emptiness of separation…
just not enough to wash away the
     hope
that someday,
       the past will find a way to renew itself.
that someday,
       then, will once again become
                              now.

[This message has been edited by esclandre (edited 06-11-2001).]

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

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1 posted 2001-06-11 06:45 PM

now this is excellent. . . I love the form, the wording. . . very unique. . .

welcome. . . hope to see more of your work. . .

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-06-11 06:49 PM

I would echo Sven's comments, and only add that this is a little more...and a true reading delight...thank you! Welcome to Passions! Please, check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2001-06-11 06:55 PM

Absolutely...at times the same opportunities exist for then to become now...and pleasure becomes the blessing of the moment not of the memory.....James

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

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4 posted 2001-06-11 07:25 PM

Excellent excellent excellent...

welcome to our forums...I'll definitely be looking out for more of your writing...

K

esclandre
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since 2001-06-11

Posts 62
Northern California

5 posted 2001-06-11 07:44 PM

Thank you all for your kindness on this poor example of poetry. Your kindness is overwhelming.

I forgot to put in the poem above, but "Je le Rêve, je Pleure" Translates to "I Dream, I cry."

JamesMichael: "pleasure becomes the blessing of the moment not of the memory" - I LOVE that, it's beautiful, and one can always hope, though I doubt he and I will ever reach reconciliation.

Thank you!

Esclandre

Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
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since 2001-06-02

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6 posted 2001-06-11 07:49 PM

A very good read,
Touching and beautiful
Thank You
Mr»ÄlleÿÇät

wayoutwalt
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7 posted 2001-06-11 07:52 PM

affected me greatly

liked it yuh

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2001-06-11 07:55 PM

amazing,
      how one night can play the previous
like an implement of hesitation on the path to redemption.
miraculous that I survive one dream to the next,
when each threatens to emaciate my humour,
to hasten the demise of a colourful future
which was once imprinted with promise.

tears purge,
    cascading down wrinkles of experience
    like a river chasing away winter,
they heal the emptiness of separation…
just not enough to wash away the
     hope
that someday,
       the past will find a way to renew itself.
that someday,
       then, will once again become
                              now.
==================
yes..this is indeed excellent..
very cool imagery and vocabulary choices
Welcome to Poetry Land, so nice to have you here...
I too look forward to more of your creative style.
take care
jm

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

snowpants
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KS

9 posted 2001-06-11 08:00 PM

'amazing,
      how one night can play the previous
like an implement of hesitation on the path to redemption.
miraculous that I survive one dream to the next,
when each threatens to emaciate my humour,
to hasten the demise of a colourful future
which was once imprinted with promise.'

Wonderfully written, esclandre...great first post!  I, too, love the vocabulary choices...Welcome to Passions!

sp

I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why
Everything gotta change around me
I’d tell it to your face,
But you lost your face along the way...

Poet deVine

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10 posted 2001-06-11 11:48 PM

Welcome to our humble home! I do enjoy this very much and will look for your name to read more of your work.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2001-06-12 12:25 PM

Esclandre~
Welcome to our circle of poets and friends.
Enjoyed your thoughts.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Martie

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12 posted 2001-06-12 12:28 PM

Wonderful way you have with words..fresh and unusual...Welcome to Passions!

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2001-06-12 01:23 AM

Oh this is terrific!
excellent writing, love your word choice.

Welcome!

Maree

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

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New Brunswick Canada

14 posted 2001-06-12 05:28 AM

"amazing,
                      how one night can play the previous
                like an implement of hesitation on the path to redemption.
                miraculous that I survive one dream to the next,
                when each threatens to emaciate my humour,
                to hasten the demise of a colourful future
                which was once imprinted with promise.

                tears purge,
                    cascading down wrinkles of experience
                    like a river chasing away winter,
                they heal the emptiness of separation…
                just not enough to wash away the
                     hope
                that someday,
                       the past will find a way to renew itself.
                that someday,
                       then, will once again become
                                              now."

I know this feeling from experience..............excellent writing!

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

15 posted 2001-06-12 09:07 AM

(clapping) Loved the form and the wording... this is an excellent piece..and one I had to re-read several times...just so I could selfishly enjoy...

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

16 posted 2001-06-12 09:36 AM

amazing,
how one night can play the previous
like an implement of hesitation on the path to redemption.
====================
Welcome to Passions. I look forward to more of your work.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

esclandre
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since 2001-06-11

Posts 62
Northern California

17 posted 2001-06-12 05:34 PM

Thank you everyone for such a wonderful welcome! I feel at home already!

Esclandre

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