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Decaflame
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0 posted 2001-06-11 12:16 PM


One Person

One person,
seeking guidance,
questioning,
believing that someone’s belief
in that own self is needed,
as the person’s belief
suffers, lacking

where is that divining light

One person,
knowing how it is,
having put up barriers of complacency
in order to get along,
seeing
it is not working out
as well as it should
have,
as truth is coming out,
the marriage is dying,
it should be buried
and no one knows whether to give it a funeral
or stuff it like a so much beloved pet
of what once was

flowers are fading

One person, seeing marriage struggle to
remain afloat,
acknowledging the shipmate’s refusal
to see that one way
is the only way,
when both mates are diametric in their stance

such a black storm

One person,
feeling verbal abuse and anger
wearing thin the veneer of life,
and their ages, opposed,
one not ready to retire, and die
so who then, is the stalemate
on this checkered board

where is the fun of the game

There are times
they put themselves into social situations,
to behave in act accordingly,
but after
all is said and done,
the dye was been cast,
and the colors have bled

as one hears the rent of the weave

one person
dies

one person
cries



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Mother_Earth
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1 posted 2001-06-11 12:47 PM


Decaflame,the marriage is over and new life can begin.  You have written of the death well.  Hugs,  ME
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2 posted 2001-06-11 12:50 PM


And is it not,
that even in death
life is formed anew?
All that dies decays
to be fed upon and enrich
the things which come after.
Sad... but well done...


Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-06-11 01:42 PM


flowers are fading

One person, seeing marriage struggle to
remain afloat,
acknowledging the shipmate’s refusal
to see that one way
is the only way,
when both mates are diametric in their stance

such a black storm

One person,
feeling verbal abuse and anger
wearing thin the veneer of life,
and their ages, opposed,
one not ready to retire, and die
so who then, is the stalemate
on this checkered board

where is the fun of the game

There are times
they put themselves into social situations,
to behave in act accordingly,
but after
all is said and done,
the dye was been cast,
and the colors have bled

as one hears the rent of the weave

one person
dies

one person
cries
========================

since it takes two....
nothing more needs be said...
(this reaches & touches me..but you knew it would)

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

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4 posted 2001-06-11 01:47 PM


Oh do I ever identify with that one!  Very well written, as that is exactly what happens one dies inside, and the other crys.  Well done.

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them as tomorrow may never come ~*~

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5 posted 2001-06-11 02:09 PM


Decaflame,

This is such a painful write.  Assuming that it is true, I wish you both well and hope you're able to work things.

Michael  

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

Victoria
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6 posted 2001-06-11 02:35 PM


Very sad..nicely written..sometimes its so hard to leave even when you wish to..

                 ~Victoria~


Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso


brian madden
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ireland
7 posted 2001-06-11 03:25 PM


as truth is coming out,
the marriage is dying,
it should be buried
and no one knows whether to give it a funeral
or stuff it like a so much beloved pet
of what once was


Powerful writing, I guess all fires die out when they are not tended to be by both parties, even love. enjoyed the read



  

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

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Deep in the heart
8 posted 2001-06-11 04:39 PM


Seek guidance from the One who gives the best direction.
Martie
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9 posted 2001-06-11 05:05 PM


Decaflame--sometimes people change and directions no longer match..it is sad, but a fact...and it is impossible to hold on, and hard to let go.  A powerful write here about this struggle.
Kit McCallum
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10 posted 2001-06-11 05:14 PM


"having put up barriers of complacency"

"wearing thin the veneer of life"

Wonderful phrasing Decaflame ... you've captured such a sadness at the loss of what may have been once "shared" within these lines. This was a gripping read, really well done.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sven
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11 posted 2001-06-11 06:12 PM


I can feel the sadness in this one Decaflame, I feel that you speak for so many with these words. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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