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That's Where You Were
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That's Where You Were |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN 
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Lyric. As always, comments and suggestions are always welcome. I'm wading through this muddy creek barefoot with my radio wind is warm, water's cold the song is just a echo The sun is hanging on to the sky and I'm trying not to cry ********* CHORUS>> Cus that's where you were the last time I saw you and that's where I want you to be right now How do I learn, to live without you? when everywhere I turn that's where you were ********* I'm sitting on my ol back porch fireflies are dancing doing just what they do best tryin to find romance and the sun is trying to say good-nite and I'm wishing I could fly... CHORUS Bridge>> I know that you won't come back I'm dreamin but it's just that feelin that you're still here.... The daffodils are in the yard right where you planted them I added tulips late this fall and took a chance that the sun would keep them alive and somehow we'd both survive cus THAT'S WHERE YOU WERE the last time I saw you and that's where I want you to be right now..... (does anyone relate to this? Did i lose you anywhere?) xoxoxo Kindest regards, Kay-lynn [This message has been edited by redwriter1 (edited 06-10-2001).] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Kay-lynn, yes, I know where you are coming from, and you said it so well and so very nicely...gentle smile |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Thank you Logan. I have received some comments previously that they wanted to know if the person in the song was dead or gone or what. I don't think it really matters do you? The "missing" feeling is universal I think. (smile) |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
This is beautiful. I've never been able to write songs, but you've done it wonderfully. Very emotional. I applaud. Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
....I sit here in silence, going back in time to familiar places...familiar faces...a link I share with you in the very real emotions stirred from an empty place at the table of the heart!!! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Kay-lynn, no, it matters not, missing is missing,sometimes even with someone there...gentle smile |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The daffodils are in the yard right where you planted them I added tulips late this fall and took a chance that the sun would keep them alive and somehow we'd both survive cus THAT'S WHERE YOU WERE the last time I saw you and that's where I want you to be right now..... ============================ loved the melodics and cadence of this.. it read to me like its about someone who died.. but maybe I put that there...but youre right... it doesnt matter if its a break up or death.. the missing and longing are conveyed. Too bad we cant load this up on real player and hear it. well done lady of the lyric, nice to see your name here again.  she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
of course, missing is missing...doesnt make any difference... sometimes i feel you can lose a friend even when you still keep in touch with him...desnt have to take a break up or death to lose someone, yup?? |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Thank you friends, for all your kind words. It's nice to know I don't have to RE-WRITE this one! (smile) I will get a real audio version prepared soon. I previously posted THE LAST MAN ON EARTH a while back, you can hear that one at www.mp3.com/kaylynn Thanks again for giving me your comments, it truly does help. |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Janet Marie, you picked my favorite verse also. (the one some say I should cut out) hahaha... I'm glad you like that part.... (smile) |
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