»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #14
»
Painful Night
| Open Poetry #14 |
|
Painful Night |
|
|
Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
It's a painful night The candles softening the edges of sight but my mind scrapes across the emotions tearing the tender skin of my heart to bleed quietly I reach for my center but fear slickened fingertips keep slipping and silently I search for any friend I might have to help me through but I find none And so, tonight slender fingers shall tap keys searching for a release of emotions overwhelming Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
||
| © Copyright 2001 Tovi Borden - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
then let your night become more peaceful with the realization of the friends around you who love and care...gentle smile |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It's a painful night The candles softening the edges of sight but my mind scrapes across the emotions tearing the tender skin of my heart to bleed quietly ======================== this is achingly beautiful Tovi... and the last verse sums up perfectyl what so many of us discoved when we began writing... in the release of the words...and each other we find quiet comfort...and in time healing. and your signature...very cool...and very true... take care jm she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
||
|
Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Thank you Logan. I've many acquaintances, but very few friends, at least that I could open my heart up to. I should really work on that. Your comments are always very kind. Janet Marie, you are so very kind. I appriciate your comments very much. Thank you. Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
||
|
Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...I am very familiar with the hopeless, desperate feeling of reaching out for someone to "help me make it through the pain the night holds" only to realize we alone are the ones in control...very beautifully related thoughts... |
||
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely expressed. Captures the feeling very well.... and solace is found in knowing we shall endure, grow, and perhaps be the one to offer that which we needed most at one time to another now in need |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tovi, I agree with JM. Well done. |
||
|
snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Excellently worded, Tovi...great write! sp  I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why |
||
|
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This is so heartbreaking. Aw, hang in there. It does get better. May not seem like it now, but it will. Best of luck to you! All writing comes |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
