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Carousels and Brass Rings (Love was always loving you)
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Carousels and Brass Rings (Love was always loving you) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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You are what I wanted You are what I hunted And, As far as I knew Love, Was loving you Carousels and brass rings Playing in my mind. You are all I ever hoped to find. I hope to find you love me A love that will withstand I hope to find the brass ring Is gold upon your hand You’re my warmest center Let spring turn out for winter If our hearts beat out of tune Would they unravel soon? Spun from golden thread The type that spins my head That’s where it would start The thread upon our heart The needle plays the tune Would it unravel soon? Carousels and brass rings Playing in my mind. You are all I ever hoped to find. You, I could not conceive You’d give your time for me And now we make believe Round and round and free Threads of golden strand A love that will withstand I hope to find the brass ring Is gold upon your hand [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-10-2001).] |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Ah........I love to see a man in love!  Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ Soft and lovely. 'You’re my warmest center Let spring turn out for winter' I liked this ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
The brass ring fascinates so many, yet so many refuse the risk of falling. It is warming to find one who was swung out sans net, risking all he is for that elusive prize: love. Very well expressed, WoW, and the unstructured approach with varied line breaks trains the eye, causing better absorption of material and message. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walty you amaze me my friend, that line you asked about earlier, fits in very well now that I have read the rest of the poem So if you ask me about a line, maybe it is best if I read the whole poemt first whaddaya say?I really liked this m'dear well done Maree |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Walt, this spins me dizzy! It's wonderful! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Walt!......super romantic! You got the old heart out and beating in this one..... love this repeat....... "Carousels and brass rings Playing in my mind. You are all I ever hoped to find." Well I hope that brass ring does turn to gold for you! Great poem Walt! |
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theLadypoet Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 97Or USA |
 **sigh** theLadypoet smiles "brass...will be gold upon your hand" gotta be a quart of Godiva Raspberry truffle! theLadypoet "A woman is like a tea bag, you never know how strong she is until she gets in hot water..." Eleanor Rooevelt |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You’re my warmest center Let spring turn out for winter so very beautiful..maybe my next name should be Spryng  teasin' ya~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
JustWhoYouGotItBadFor? |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i wanted to thank you all o yuh |
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