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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-06-10 08:31 PM


err...be truthful if ya have to! LOL! These are my poor attempts at some form, but remember I'm a beginner. The MANY years ago that I have done stuff like this really don't count anymore.

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Friendship glimmering
A precious stone awaiting
Lucky fingers find
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Smile leaks from the heart
Spreading joy on frowning lips
Charmed from the inside


[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 06-10-2001).]

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Watersign6
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1 posted 2001-06-10 08:32 PM


I think this is a beautiful write and the lines are great  
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2 posted 2001-06-10 09:15 PM


Temptress~
You did a wonderful job on both of these Senryu's.

Go gal !
~*Marge*~

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Logan
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3 posted 2001-06-10 09:35 PM


Gentle one, what more needs to be said, you have said it all in just a few words..Beginner? Bah, you are too good...gentle smile
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4 posted 2001-06-11 06:05 PM


good job with these. . . they get easier when you do them more. . .    so, try to write a whole bunch. . . just remember, less is more. . .

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Titia Geertman
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5 posted 2001-06-11 06:11 PM


You haven't lost your touch.
They are so nice

Titia

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Irish Rose
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6 posted 2001-06-11 08:02 PM


I am new to this form myself and appreciate being able to learn from others like yourself!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


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