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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-06-10 08:15 AM


Stage Two

I’m building a world on the point of extreme
A beautiful world on the edge of a dream
With flowers and castles and flights of a dove
A place that only encompasses love

It will have green valleys and waterfalls
Blue cathedrals and golden walls
Gardens full of exotic things
Everything that a mind can bring

It will have the grace of a butterfly
A palette of color an aura sky
And a warmth only second to the sun
With a charm that will never be done

It will have but one entrance one goal
Only through the doorway of my soul
It will bar all else that would do it harm
For those are its goals and soul of its charm.

It will open to one and only to one
When that is accomplished it will be done.


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1 posted 2001-06-10 08:22 AM


A lifetime achievement, accomplished by those who know their heart....

smiling, applauding....hoping....

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-06-10 08:27 AM


Very beautiful Seymour ... a wonderful cadence and rhyme to this inspirational piece, much enjoyed!    

Best wishes,
/Kit

[Sorry Sy, I got so caught up in the moment ... no excuses, I've fixed it now and enjoyed a second read as well - see what your poetry does to me?]  

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-10-2001).]

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-06-10 08:32 AM


Sunshine,
Thank you sweet. *L*

Kit,
What's with the Sudhir? That is the second time it happened. But regardless I'm glad you liked it.

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-06-10 09:51 AM


Seymour~
Such a lovely rhyme
Such a lovely place
I can see the smile
of love upon your face

'A place that only encompasses love'

That would be a dream palace for sure !
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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5 posted 2001-06-10 09:52 AM


I’m building a world on the point of extreme
A beautiful world on the edge of a dream
With flowers and castles and flights of a dove
A place that only encompasses love




It will have green valleys and waterfalls
Blue cathedrals and golden walls
Gardens full of exotic things
Everything that a mind can bring




It will have the grace of a butterfly
A palette of color an aura sky
And a warmth only second to the sun
With a charm that will never be done




It will have but one entrance one goal
Only through the doorway of my soul
It will bar all else that would do it harm
For those are its goals and soul of its charm.



It will open to one and only to one
When that is accomplished it will be done.
=========================

A mystic doorway ... a garden of Eden in store
A place of peace ... where butterflies soar
I love walking barefoot ... on the beaches of your mind
all there is wisdom ... wrapped in rhyme and kind.

Stage two maps the goal ... to your beaches of understand
Porthole to your soul ... heart in your hand.

~~~~~~~~~~~~
*winkiewinkie*
me

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2001-06-10 10:50 AM


Marge,
You are like a butterfly to me. Read tomorows poem it will explain what I mean. *L* Sy

JM,
Your pictures to the poem are exquisite as is your comentary. You really brighten my day
Love ya Sy

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