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Neon Dolls |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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REading SPitfire's latest post reminded me of a poem I had with images of dolls in it, a surreal piece that I was never happy with. I decided to revamp it and rewrite it, so in a way this is almost a new poem. ======================= Neon Dolls: sub title: Table ethics (version 4) The dolls, under neon vanquish have their eyes sown shut in constant protest to their commodity. Infants, you must not venture into those red lights, for there sit the Armani ogres feasting on youthful bliss. To droning nightclubbeats Over alcoholic ash strays crawls this voyeurist/ virus to my host seated in a garden of ignominy and Fushimi. "The desert is so beautiful but it occupies my mind as an obsession. Many a wise man have died in her affections". My first host has her mouth-sown. It seems a crime, in equal measure, to be silenced for the sins that Man fears confessed. My first host cries freedom from her constraints It is western policy to comply politely with cold currency. Under silt swallowing I paralyse. Wonder how I fell from civil company to oral defilement? -------------------- Junk is the ideal product. The ultimate merchandise. No sales talk necessary. The client will crawl through a sewer and beg to buy. The junk merchant does not sell his product to the consumer, he sells the consumer to his product. He does not improve and simplify his merchandise. He degrades and simplifies the client. William S. Burroughs "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sad sigh) It is so very sad but true how the media and the junk of todays world has contaminated the minds of youth, these ogres hypnotizing rites of passages and putting the slice into the slice of life, and in result, the children create rebellions against their parents! (sad sigh) I can't help but cry thinking of all the innocence lost, and if we can ever find a way to bring love back into this world the way it once was. (sad sigh) This is a marvelous poem Brian, it is one of my favorites of yours yet and a classic to me. (smiles) You truly have amazing talent! I love it!!! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Intriguing piece. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wow, there is so much truth to this piece, Brian. Great write, here. Thank you for sharing it. All writing comes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You keep doing that....you keep writing these pieces that come to me one way...then at the very end, your pieces whisper "oops, now don't put me away so rapidly, for I have just bent the read" and I go back and read again...and again...and again... so I put it into my library, where I know I will always find it.... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Noah, the quote I used was William Burroughs talking about Heroin. The poem is not about drugs but something just as dark. The image for the poem is something far darker than what may have been revealed. THe first three verses are quite important and contain references to the central theme of the poem. Thank you for your interruption of the poem the poem does to a certain extent concern the media and selling but what is for sale is not ideals. Thanks for reading VAS, thanks. I felt the only way to write this was in a cryptic fashion. Lone Wolf, thanks for your very kind reply. And unfortunately there is truth in this. Karilea, phew.... my god, you have me speechless and blushing red. I always try to write to make people question and ask questions even if they are hard ones. Your words are the greatest compliment that anyone could ever pay to my poetry. THank you kindly. "Ladies and gentlemen of the jury, exhibit number one is what the seraphs, the misinformed, simple noble-winged seraphs, envied. Look at this tangle of thorns". Vladimir Nabokov "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-10-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My first host has her mouth-sown. It seems a crime, in equal measure, to be silenced for the sins that Man fears confessed. My first host cries freedom from her constraints It is western policy to comply politely with cold currency. Under silt swallowing I paralyse. Wonder how I fell from civil company to oral defilement? =================================== ahh the way your mind unfolds is like a walk thru wonderland with the funny mirrors that distort all the images till you look directly in the reflections eyes... very cool version and rewrite... and even better when inspired by a fellow poets work. later-groovy-gator eve  she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i love you your writing is superb you own the poetry nothing more to say...... my friend,...... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Eveagator, you sure know how to make me feel special.Phew thank you for your wonderful reply. Doreen, I am blushing and speechless and my ego has just inflated to unbelievable portions. THank you for your reply. "I loved you. I was a pentapod monster, but I loved you. I was despicable and brutal, and turpid, and everythng.." Nabokov "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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