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Tovi
Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 168

0 posted 2001-06-09 01:47 PM

I tried to sleep
but the words
whispered in my mind
teasing me like
a million diamonds
just out of reach
that I will always
live to touch
To be covered richly
in all their possibilities

That powerful magic
when they're placed
just so
when the breath is caught
the mind enriched
and the heart is flooded
by all the emotion captured
in the wonder of
those written words

Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment.

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

1 posted 2001-06-09 01:59 PM

"teasing me like
a million diamonds
just out of reach"

Oh, I know this feeling very much, a lovely analogy. Nicely done.

Poeminister

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-06-09 02:23 PM

I tried to sleep
but the words
whispered in my mind
teasing me like
a million diamonds
just out of reach
that I will always
live to touch
To be covered richly
in all their possibilities
===================

YES!!! that is it exactly...
I have always said...sleep seems like such a waste of perfectly inspired poetry time.
very cool write of a poets treasures moment of inspiration.
Well done Tovi

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

3 posted 2001-06-09 02:58 PM

how many times we drift to sleep, only at the very last moment, it comes together and drifts..yes, Tovi, you grasp it so well...gentle smile

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2001-06-09 03:15 PM

Tovi~
Many nights I've rested my head
on a pillowcase of poetic lace~

You captured the moments so nicely.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

5 posted 2001-06-09 03:28 PM

~Oh too true you. Neat read.

. Enjoyed this. *Peace.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

6 posted 2001-06-09 03:50 PM

As only a writer's mind could understand...well done!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2001-06-09 04:53 PM

Very nice. Just this morning I found the most wonderful poem half asleep, and it left when I got up, before I could write it down! This is great, perfectly portrays the subject.
Sandra

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2001-06-09 04:59 PM

(sigh) Whew, I can relate to this kind of condition so very well, where my mind is screaming to release all these thoughts that are flooding my mind, and I just don't have the time to write down all of them because of school and other schedules! But now I'm on summer break, and I get much more out of my head! (sigh) I know that feeling of never getting a hand on those "diamonds", but it is also a great feeling just knowing the ones you do possess! (smiles) Marvelous poem, it really had me thinking! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-06-09 06:41 PM

You know, Tovi, I have always found it remarkable that books, poetry, and music even can touch us in ways we never thought possible. You have captured it well here.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2001-06-09 06:44 PM

Believe it or not, "ditto" is a compliment!

Hope
New Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 4
The Lighthouse Keeper's Beam

11 posted 2001-06-09 11:27 PM

Plots and Plays
that defy
even the hope
of sleep tonight

Dreams will again come
collapsing need not be
your only remedy time offers

Take what you can
study the writers mind your choice
surely a disclaimer is signed and hidden

"Hope IS like a lighthouse Keeper's beam"

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

12 posted 2001-06-10 12:22 PM

Oh, I do like this.

You've written truth! LOL!

Truth
New Member

since 2001-06-06

Posts 3
Right Before Your Eyes

13 posted 2001-06-10 12:57 PM

Words lead onward
pathways torches direction
written again and again and
seeking sparks words unreleasing

should you follow trails unknown but
calling always calling words define dreams
linear clarity life multidunous yours page
heartsblood song reaches past forever to find

Faith is melding
body soul mind heart
above all listen to the songs leading
singing in your heart now you know all inside

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