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S Arthur Grey
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0 posted 2001-06-09 01:20 AM


On rippled water
Sunlight in a clear brilliance
Shatters to diamonds
            
          
          
(thanks for the haiku idea, Mysteria)

S Arthur

. . . Hills jump with brooks.
trees tumble out of twigs and sticks;
e e cummings

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JLR
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1 posted 2001-06-09 02:09 AM


Blinded by the brilliance of the light!
Charisma
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2 posted 2001-06-09 02:36 AM


Early glamour light
golden threads catched morning dew
peaceable image




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3 posted 2001-06-09 03:38 AM


I wish so much I was more talented at writing these.  This is excellent.  I loved it.
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4 posted 2001-06-09 07:52 AM



Might I add to the Collection?


On rippled water
Sunlight in a clear brilliance
Shatters to diamonds

Early glamour light
golden threads catching morning dew
peaceable image

Sunshine overhead
Smooth stones showing underneath
Ripples in dew drips

Gloom


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5 posted 2001-06-09 08:11 AM


Early morning glow
imply shattered diamond's bliss
awaken nature

off course you may add....as I can't resist the dew drips inhere...

Charisma


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6 posted 2001-06-09 08:38 AM


~*~

sunshine dances light
on dewdrops of slender blades
fairies see rainbows

~*~

wheee!

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7 posted 2001-06-09 04:06 PM


Enjoyed!  Well done!

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8 posted 2001-06-09 04:18 PM


Rene Magritte sighs
As mountain lakes start to dance
Beneath rainbow dreams

BRAVO!!! I love it, I thought of this inspirational artist reading this wonderful delightful haiku! I love watching the skies reflect on the water, it shows and reveals so much! (smiles) Beautiful, I love it very much! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2001-06-09 04:58 PM


SArthurGrey~
Brilliantly done.
Generating so much inspiration.
*Applause*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2001-06-09 06:44 PM


Oh!  That is it exactly!!!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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11 posted 2001-06-09 06:53 PM


S Arthur Grey,

    A stunning haiku! I looooved it! Thank you for sharing

TaraB

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12 posted 2001-06-09 08:18 PM


Superbly vivid!!!
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13 posted 2001-06-09 08:35 PM


lovely...can't wait to see more of your haiku
S Arthur Grey
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14 posted 2001-06-13 08:30 PM


JLR, Charisma, Tovi, Gloom, Sunshine, Poeminister, Noah, Marge, Lone Wolf, Tara, VAS, faterider:
Thank you all so much for your kind responses!
And glad to be inspirational.  More nice haiku here.
I have a vivid picture of this in my head, and can feel the warm breeze.  Too bad I can't send all of that along too.
Tovi,
I think you can do this.  You need two things.  Photograph images in your mind and study them.  Practice, practice, practice, haiku.  I spent the year 2000 attempting to write in haiku only.  I wrote virtually nothing else.  Now, I can think in haiku, like a language.  It worked so well, I may do this again with another form . . .

S Arthur

. . . Hills jump with brooks.
trees tumble out of twigs and sticks;
e e cummings

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