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Sven
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0 posted 2001-06-08 01:22 PM


mind,
take solace
in the fact
that his
memory
will not
fade from
thy
canvas

that the
picture
of his
handsome
face on
that first
day
will always
be etched
there for
eternity

that even
though
that picture
may change
through
and with
time
in life,
it will
never change
for thee

thou shalt
always
remember
the way
that
his eyes
seem to
see into
thy very
being

thou shalt
always
remember
the sound
of his
delicate
voice
singing softer
than even
that of
the
angels

thou shalt
always
know
the touch
of his hands
of life
across thy
time worn
face

and, when
life is
over
and he
is
no longer
part
of this
plane

thou wilt
always
remember
that
he did
love thee

and that
his memory
will
always
be

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Decaflame
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1 posted 2001-06-08 01:25 PM


this....minds me very well.....
ethome
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2 posted 2001-06-08 01:30 PM


Ah Sven you are so smooth with your delivery............You're a poet that makes such huge mental inroads with your soft flowing poet's words....well done my friend!!
Tiersdin
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3 posted 2001-06-08 01:38 PM


Beautiful, as always, Sven...

loved reading this...

~Tier

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4 posted 2001-06-08 02:01 PM


agree with all... very masterful in delivery and word choices..
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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-06-08 02:03 PM


Always...
Tovi
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6 posted 2001-06-08 02:53 PM


Delicate and gentle beauty.  I do so like this form.  
inot2B
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7 posted 2001-06-08 03:15 PM


Oh, Sven, this places my heart in my throat as a tear glides down my cheek. Touching, beautiful are only words, they can not express how this makes me feel.

Charisma
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8 posted 2001-06-08 05:34 PM


inhale your words carefully to enjoy it over and over.

((hugs))
Charisma

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9 posted 2001-06-08 06:00 PM


your a beautiful writer sven...i cant say more of the beauty i se in your poetry...enjoyed greatly and the last stanzas...perfect ...until next time.

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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10 posted 2001-06-08 09:07 PM


Sven,

  I'm gonna ramble slightly.. so be prepared ..lol.  This poem actually reminds me of grandmother.. my grandfather passed away in 92. She has a painting of her and himself when they were younger, and I see catch her sometimes looking at it.  I had this printed it out as soon as I read it and took it to my grandmother's for her to read.. and she loved it.  It brought a tear to her eye and she said she was going to frame it and hang it next to the painting.

With that story told.. it was simply beautiful my friend

TaraB

Isis
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11 posted 2001-06-08 09:37 PM


And thy poem is a sweet reminder for anyone remembering a lost love...
Beautiful Sven  
Isis

*Enlightenment is within all things*
~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit.



Cerenity
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12 posted 2001-06-08 10:04 PM


Hi Sven,

Simply heart-warmingly beautiful, I love the imagery that one can put with this piece, this one everyone can enjoy to its fullest by relating to thier own lives,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



nakdthoughts
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13 posted 2001-06-08 11:18 PM


thou wilt
always
remember
that
he did
love thee

and that
his memory
will
always
be
...beautiful, Sven

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Sven
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14 posted 2001-06-09 11:33 AM


thank you to everyone that's replied. . . I'm really having some fun with this form. . . there's really no rhyme or reason to it, I just like the way that it looks on the page. . . LOL. . .  

rp25, I'm so totally touched and amazed that I could touch you and your Grandmother in this way. . . to know that I have done so truly humbles me, it's a great feeling to know that my words can speak to people in ways that I could never possibly imagine. . . it makes me glad to be a poet. . . blessings to you both. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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