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Love … Chapter one - a collaboration with SEA
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Love … Chapter one - a collaboration with SEA |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
soft music begins hopeful toes tap wanting chance to dance he extends his hand asks for this waltz wanting to hold her taking hand given causing trembling she stands carefully noting her beauty and graceful ways he becomes entranced with a quiet strength he leads this dance making her feel weak melting in his arms yet so graceful he guides her outside the night air gives chills arms wrap around safe….she yields to him bathed in the moonlight her lips invite he kisses softly she’s waited so long his kiss…..perfect this night, is magic ~*~ [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 06-08-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
wonderful this weave is beautiful |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ahhhh this is much more than wonderful.....treat to read. love it... Charisma |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Interloper~  thank you so much for joining me in this poetic dance......you are wonderful ~SEA |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
To all: This was written in a competely different form of 5-4-5 we shall call SEAryu Sunshine ~ Thank you, lovely senryu. You must try SEAryu one time Charisma ~ SEA and I thank you and note your reading and comment is our treat SEA ~ Your movement of word in verse made this what it is. I just tagged along for the ride and it was enjoyable indeed Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 06-08-2001).] |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Interloper.....you are so easy to work with....your flow is so smooth.....I really had a lot of fun doing this......thank you for indulging me in the 5-4-5 format.... ~SEA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A lovely collaboration that floated across the dance floor of poetry. Bravo to you both a perfect duet of talent~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
enjoyed this format very very much, I'm always impressed when someone takes the time and effort to craft a poem.....thanks you two! Kathleen Blake |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
Love this very much. Reads like music!  I can't control |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"sea-ryu.. LOL....I LIKE IT!!! great job melding and melting you two  *L*she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You two write one heck of a great love story! I'll be waiting for the next chapter! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you all for your sweet replies....this was a lot of fun to do..hopefully.....there will be more |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ and InterLoper~ Entranced by the melding of hearts~ NiSEAly done ! It's such a pure pleasure to watch you two dance. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marge~ thank you so very much..... ~SEA |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, you two! Very romantic! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautiful, hope to see more done by the two of you. ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~ |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Denise and Mysteria~ thank you ladies very much I had so much fun doing this with Interloper ~SEA |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
Beautiful u2! Nicely written! Fantastic! I've got the chills from head to toe! Thanks for the wonderful read! |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Wonderful! I love seeing two poets working together. Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Thank you all for your fabulous comments. We truly enjoyed working together and we are very appreciative of your gracious response. |
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