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Watersign6
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0 posted 2001-06-07 10:36 PM



"The Quiet Ones"
by:Kelli Kay (c)2001

watch out for the quiet ones
thats what people always say
why do they draw conclusions
before they know anything
maybe if they were quiet for a change
they'd hear what we dont say
silence is golden
my rule for today
creativeness flows into this space
loneliness exists in everyones heart
you can take a look at my mind
just dont pick it apart
my heart tells my mind
to write whats real
my hand follows the command
and prints the words I've concealed
my heart tells my mind
to write what I feel
look at things differently
with a minds eye instilled
view the unfulfilled
acknowledge yourself
bring your free will
watch out for the quiet ones
they sometimes get too loud
turning the tables
bringing the crowds
freeing minds
independent child
watch out for the quiet ones
they sometimes get too loud

© Copyright 2001 Kelli Kay - All Rights Reserved
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression
1 posted 2001-06-07 10:43 PM


Good expression,
and a good flow of words.
Perhaps
if you'd hang it on a bit of structure,
a comma or two, a period,
and maybe a rhyme pattern,
But that is just my bias to form.
A fine random flow.

Gloom

azblond
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The Steamy Desert
2 posted 2001-06-07 10:46 PM


"My heart tells my mind to write what I feel"
I love it...

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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3 posted 2001-06-07 10:56 PM


So much truth packed into this piece...
alot can be learned from the "quiet ones"..
Great writing~

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2001-06-07 10:58 PM


Oh, I like this one!!  Much enjoyed!!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
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Regina SK; Canada
5 posted 2001-06-07 11:09 PM


Wonderful write, watersign. Enjoyed this very much.

Poeminister

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2001-06-07 11:18 PM


The world is filled with introverts and extroverts and every imaginable combination in between....I consider myself about right in the middle...yet some consider me a quiet one...James
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
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7 posted 2001-06-08 12:23 PM


maybe if they were quiet for a change
they'd hear what we dont say
silence is golden
my rule for today
creativeness flows into this space
loneliness exists in everyones heart
you can take a look at my mind
just dont pick it apart
my heart tells my mind
to write whats real
my hand follows the command
and prints the words I've concealed
=========================

theres a whole lot of wisdom in these words...
this is a very cool collection of thoughts and inspire...
very well done  

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

PoemCrazy
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8 posted 2001-06-08 12:34 PM




some stuff to read if you're interested:
http://www.library.utoronto.ca/utel/rp/poetterm.html

Temptress
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9 posted 2001-06-08 12:37 PM


Oh yes..I love what you have said here, and you have used all the right words to bring it together. I know these thoughts as I am generally a quiet one myself.   Excellent!
Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
10 posted 2001-06-08 07:45 AM


P.Gloom-thanks for reading it and for the
suggestions  

azblond-thank you very much  

Butterflies-glad you enjoyed it  

Lonewolf-thanks my poet friend  

Poeminister-thanks for the nice words  

James-glad you enjoyed the read  

JanetMarie-thanks a million  

PoemCrazy-thanks for the webpage and i will
have to check it out,also thanks for reading my poem  

Temptress-your too kind,thanks  

Cpat Hair
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11 posted 2001-06-08 09:00 AM


nicely said... it is the quiet ones..the ones who do listen...

enjoyed!

Tovi
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Posts 168

12 posted 2001-06-08 09:37 AM


Well said.  I've always had a deep admiration for the quiet ones.  
Charisma
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lost in blue pages
13 posted 2001-06-08 09:45 AM


very well said, enjoyed the read.

((hugs))
Charisma

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

14 posted 2001-06-08 11:45 AM


Silence can indeed be golden, other times it can be a prison.
Enjoyed!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Captivating1
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since 2001-06-07
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Houston, TX
15 posted 2001-06-08 12:35 PM


Very nice...and oh sooo true:-)
Sven
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East Lansing, MI USA
16 posted 2001-06-08 12:46 PM


hey WS6, I'm one of those quiet ones. . .  

well, at least that's what they say. . . great job with this one. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

17 posted 2001-06-08 12:49 PM


Get loud...loved this!
Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
18 posted 2001-06-08 08:47 PM


Cphat-thank you  
Tovi-thanks alot  
Charisma-glad you enjoyed  
Irish Rose-so happy your reading mine  
Captivating1-thank you  
Sven-good to know your enjoying mine  
JLR-VERY FUNNY-LOL! how's that for LOUD,capitals means i am shouting ya know,hehe
thanks very much everyone for taking the time
to read mine and for your kind replies  

Logan
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since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641
Arkansas
19 posted 2001-06-08 10:30 PM


very nice, KK, and says so much...gentle smile
Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
20 posted 2001-06-09 08:13 AM


Thanks so very much Logan
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