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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 I thought I had a musical inclination tonight, but the moon has proved me quite wrong... a simple rhyme would have been alright, but my heart just could not break into song... moving with the monotony of vague inspiration, wavering muse inconsistently provided reason to smile... and when I sensed I’d succumb to the temptation, nothing striking turned up to redirect my style... the moon glimmers couldn’t give me verse, even with the brilliance of their radiant spark... I knew I had a musical inclination tonight, and the moon has proved me quite right... a simple rhyme was the first to occur, and my heart conceived the melody I now prefer... humming to the tune of prevailing inspiration, unfaltering motivation reliably provided ardent sensation... and when I realized I’d fall into the snare of each mile, that revelation surfaced with its sidetracking style... the moon glimmers gave me unbelievable verse, especially with the brilliance of their radiant spark... -kh 06/07/01 I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
well, gentle smile, the moonlight did right, and gave you the light to write, and with those words you did smite..loved it |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully done, Kris! Lovely! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
i enjoyed this immensely Snowpants,well written my poet friend  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am so glad I did not miss this one. It is extremely lovely snowpants. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I thought I had a musical inclination tonight, but the moon has proved me quite wrong... a simple rhyme would have been alright, but my heart just could not break into song... moving with the monotony of vague inspiration, wavering muse inconsistently provided reason to smile... and when I sensed I’d succumb to the temptation, nothing striking turned up to redirect my style... the moon glimmers couldn’t give me verse, even with the brilliance of their radiant spark... ======================= this is a very cool inspire here girlie... first of all you know Im digging the rhyme and that includes the inner rhyme ya snuck in there and the way you changed off the rhyme pattern... aslo enjoyed was the repetative lines...and change of mood while staying in the same theme... it was like 2 nights of moonmadness  the whole thing was a clever premise and conception... very well done poetess snow... love watching ya grow... she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! This is so wonderfully well done... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sometimes it's there sometimes it isn't but it comes back when you least expect it. It might be just the way the moon hits your eye or shines on a window....I like this verse "I knew I had a musical inclination tonight, and the moon has proved me quite right... a simple rhyme was the first to occur, and my heart conceived the melody I now prefer..." Wonderful! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love your inspiration shimmers as they inspired your muse with this beauty. Charisma |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kris- hi sweetie...this was just simply beautiful m'friend! as always enjoy your work tremendously. i see you are doing a few different things here, trying new styles. ditto on all that Janet said , I couldn't say it any better. just really excellent girlie! love ya aims ~~~~~~~~ "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
This is just beautiful. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
oh the muse does weave its handiwork this is a sonnet, right??? sometimes when we seek hard, we find we must rest and wait and let our hearts be touched, yes? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I enjoyed this, the title brought images to mind and the poem was well written as usual! Kathleen Blake |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Logan: why thanks for your little rhyme-reply...I truly appreciate it!  Denise: thanks so much...glad you liked it! WS6: well thank you, my friend...I appreciate your kind reply! GS: well, I am glad, too! thanks so much...I'm happy you liked it! JM: hey...this is actually one of those that took on a life of its own...the first one in a while that just flowed...but, I'm happy that you liked this, too!!  Sudhir: thanks so much...I'm glad you enjoyed this! ethome: EXACTLY...that's what fickle muses do, isn't it? but thank you so much...I appreciate your reply! Charisma: thank you, my friend...I appreciate your compliments! Aims: hey you!! how the heck are ya?? it's nice to see ya 'round these parts again! and, I am especially glad you could stop in on my post, too! thanks so much...glad you enjoyed this, too! -e ~~~~~~~ Tovi: thank you for reading! VAS: yes, indeed...um, sonnet? to be honest, I haven't the slightest idea...but thank you for your reply! Kathleen: thanks! I am glad you liked this!! sp  I hopelessly, helplessly, wonder why |
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