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Martie
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0 posted 2001-06-07 04:48 PM


Joy Hurts

You were like an explosion of joy
and I knew from the signs that gathered around me
that to walk with you would change my direction
for didn’t you tell me the way was treacherous

Oh but I saw all those cantilevered feelings
and I walked out into the air with them
because you see joy is not something you feel every day

I waltzed around on this slanted experience
thinking barefoot thoughts and stripped feelings
not caring how I slid further towards the edge
carrying so much of me

until my feelings like balloons
lost the pull from the hand that held them
and they all just drifted away

I could see their bright colors
now only specks that my vision tried to collect
then when I looked down I had no foundation
and I fell
into the hurt of it

And that's how I learned
where joy should be found
here in me not from you

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-07-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Watersign6
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1 posted 2001-06-07 04:56 PM


this was very good and i enjoyed it :thumsup:
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2001-06-07 05:32 PM


And that's how I learned
where joy should be found
here in me not from you



ahhh yes indeed Martie, Joy comes from inside doesn't it ?

A beautifully written poem as usual Martie, it's always a pleasure to read you hon.

Maree  

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3 posted 2001-06-07 05:36 PM


So many, many familiarisms here, those words that are so cleverly and artfully gleaned from your pen....

and which bounced me around on your little balloon of joy....

this is a wonderful Write....a keeper....

Logan
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4 posted 2001-06-07 05:38 PM


ahh, Martie, we always seem to get smart too late..nice read..enjoyed...gentle smile
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5 posted 2001-06-07 07:17 PM


Enjoyed this Martie..James
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6 posted 2001-06-07 08:08 PM


Oh, Martie~
What a wise little penning.

The joy in you ... floats ~
finding it's way to others ~
Love n' hugs~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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7 posted 2001-06-08 12:40 PM


that to walk with you would change my direction
for didn’t you tell me the way was treacherous

=========================
I waltzed around on this slanted experience
thinking barefoot thoughts and stripped feelings
not caring how I slid further towards the edge
carrying so much of me

until my feelings like balloons
lost the pull from the hand that held them
and they all just drifted away
=============================
then when I looked down I had no foundation
and I fell
into the hurt of it

And that's how I learned
where joy should be found
here in me not from you
=================================

*shaking my head* ....
thats twice today you give me the words I need to hear...
can you read my heart that easily ...
thank you ...
maybe someday I will do better at living the words and learning the lessons.

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

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8 posted 2001-06-08 12:45 PM


That your baloons didn't burst yet merely floated away shows me how beautiful the spirit behind the writer.  Lovely... I do so look forward to reading your works.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

ethome
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9 posted 2001-06-08 06:19 AM


               "Oh but I saw all those cantilevered feelings
                 and I walked out into the air with them
                 because you see joy is not something you feel every day"

Amazing how insight can be thrown into the wind when feelings overcome.

Great write Martie!

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10 posted 2001-06-08 07:50 AM


such an important truth in the last lines... well said indeed.
Sudhir Iyer
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11 posted 2001-06-08 08:06 AM


Loved this one loads, my friend, Martie... and guess what it did to me... I stole your idea and came up with this... hope you like...

I balanced upon the ledge
Sliding my feet through the edge
In careful steps of worrisome uncertain
With trembling shakes of fear

And then I walked ahead
Hands clasped together
In united arrest as if to reassure
And my eyes waded past
To see that there was no ledge
Anymore

Since there could be no balance
Without the ledge, my surprised eyes
Saw the anguish of distrust
And the pain of discord

And the fall taught me
All about joy and the absence of it,
How that should be born in my womb
Instead of me owning a new father's expect
And the reasoning of the 'if only'

Regards to you, my friend,
Sudhir

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