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That Voodoo Scent
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That Voodoo Scent |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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As if an animal in heat you wait and wonder attracting, baiting, slowly pulling me under. Never thought of the consequences before I opened my eyes, the chain of sequences that lead to my demise. As a victim in peril, I played the part well whining, crying, anything to close the sell Trapped in the spell of your pheromones I thought of moon-drenched lovers while listening to the sound of your moans echoing from under the covers [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 06-07-2001).] |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
Powerful writing. Left me with a shiver. I truly enjoyed this read.  |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thoughtful stylish write I enjoyed reading it. Thank you. Regards, Olias. |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Wow...leaves me speechless...and breathless! Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thank you I'm glad that you enjoyed the peice. I hope you catch your breath. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Effigy this is truely Amazing writing and i am going to go seek out more of yours right now   |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
WHOOOOOO!!! Damn. I think I burned my eyes on this one. I LIKE it! This is also an excellent use of FONT. Very good choice. Unfortunately, this one has a rather atrocious rhythm to it. I'm got a longer crititiqe that I'll be emailing you, but all and all I liked it! I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. |
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