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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-06-06 08:42 PM


we work at this

I do so believe, it is not easy
to think and write, before you blink, so there
a rondel is not now a quest breezy
it takes much time and have oh so much care

four lines then four lines, a – b – a – b, see?
then try to mix in lines with quiet air
I do so believe, it is not easy
to think and write, before you blink, so there

in second stanza, last two lines are free
first stanza gave them, now they are like spare
watch then your count, on fingers in the air
and watch the rhyme, and time, it’s there you see
I do so believe, it is not easy

[post script to SEA....this is only my second one, and I researched it BUT THAT DOES NOT MAKE IT RIGHT....] so check with a pro...

don'tcha know....

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-06-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-06-06 08:47 PM


Sun--Your poem has left me dizzy!  That may be a good thing.  You're cure!
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2 posted 2001-06-06 09:31 PM


BRAVO!
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3 posted 2001-06-06 10:17 PM


you lost me......I'll save this though...maybe when I have some advil handy...I'll try........ you rock at this!!  
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4 posted 2001-06-06 10:22 PM


Helps if I put it in my library.....
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