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Tovi
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0 posted 2001-06-06 08:36 PM


Anger churns darkly
under a sparkling surface calm
My eyes study the waters of emotions carefully
finding no safe place to dip into
without fear of being swept away by
powerful undercurrents



© Copyright 2001 Tovi Borden - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-06-06 08:44 PM


Tovi, a wonderful entrance to Passions!  Welcome, and please! check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Poeminister
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2 posted 2001-06-06 08:47 PM


I can feel those undercurrents building...You've expressed it very well.
I look toward reading more of your work...

Poeminister

[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 06-06-2001).]

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-06-06 09:15 PM


Welcome to Passions!  I look forward to reading more from  you.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2001-06-06 10:00 PM


Tovi~
A wonderfully well-done entrance to our circle of poets and friends.

WELCOME !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Logan
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5 posted 2001-06-06 10:29 PM


Ahh, Tovi, what a wonderful first post, welcome to all these nice folks, for being kinna a newbie myself, they are wonderful. and you express yourself not only well, but I liked seeing you can look at the situation first before leaping in. Look for more from you in the future...gentle smile
Poet deVine
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6 posted 2001-06-06 10:35 PM


Short and to the point! I like this.  
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singapore
7 posted 2001-06-06 10:37 PM


short but throws powerful punches...you just found yourself a fan...post more, yup...
JLR
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8 posted 2001-06-07 12:57 PM


I can think of many cliches which say this very thing...but none so eloquently!  Insightful, brief and haunting.
VAS
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9 posted 2001-06-07 01:01 AM


Wow!  Do I understand this sentiment!  Well said, powerfully woven.
azblond
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10 posted 2001-06-07 02:20 AM


What a great piece...something we have all felt at one time or another put into such powerful prose.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Just A Man
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11 posted 2001-06-07 05:52 AM


The sea like so many
things alive has its
mysterys and its lies
careful where you swim

sharks are the smallest
of disasters awaiting

"In daring to dream, offering life,I am sentenced to life as a Deadman walking. Such ends all Love given."

Kit McCallum
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12 posted 2001-06-07 06:10 AM


Welcome to Passions Tovi!  Very emotive writing, nicely done ... I hope to read more!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tovi
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13 posted 2001-06-07 09:00 AM


Thank you so much, everyone, for such kind replies.  
Watersign6
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14 posted 2001-06-07 09:01 PM


great great great  
Temptress
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15 posted 2001-06-08 01:38 AM


Ahh yes..the undercurrents can be the most dangerous. I love the image you present here and the way you do it. Enjoyed..
Welcome to our Passionate haven.

walker
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16 posted 2001-06-08 07:21 AM


So much emotions, beautifully written, welcome!
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