He's Comin' Home Again---REVISED

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Open Poetry #14

He's Comin' Home Again---REVISED

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-06-06 11:59 AM

The following poem was an answer to a challenge to write to a painting. To view the painting, go to: http://artistryinpoetry.org/paintings/paintings.htm

He’s Comin’ Home Again!
Virginia Salter

Look, it’s just like the carriage in my dream
I told you, I told you!

Mama, in the shadows, clutches baby to her breast.

Papa’s comin’ home again!
‘member, in the dream,
He had a big surprise!

She peers hard into the distance.

A wiggly, squiggly, squirmy, big surprise!
I can hardly wait till they arrive!
I just know he’ll have a big, big hug
for each of us...

A tear begins to surface at the corner of her eye.

And the surprise,
well, it will be a wonderful friend,
paper tearing,
bedtime sharing,
yipping, yapping,
daytime napping
cuddly bundle of fluff...

Black curtains now evident in the depth of her sigh.

then
it’ll bring us sticks,
do charming tricks,
and curl up by the fire
when the storms are raging
and nighttime’s staging
a ‘lectric light show

A pall is reaching out, clutching her heart with enormous pain.

Papa’s comin’,
you just wait and see,
that’s Papa comin’
from across the war-torn sea
back to you and me!
Let’s go out to meet him,
last one there’s a rotten egg!

As their power brings her tears to an everlasting rain.
Children, WAIT!

© June 5, 2001

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

1 posted 2001-06-06 12:38 PM

I think this was very well done. Good work!

PM

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2001-06-06 12:40 PM

I liked it before and I like it even better with your modifications. Well done.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2001-06-06 01:30 PM

He sure must be a happy guy, having all this waiting for him.

Enjoyed it very much.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

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