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wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
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TEXAS (it's all big)

0 posted 2001-06-05 03:31 PM



I sought intentions
I seek redemption
I know that you're from
Outer dimensions

Outer dimensions
I seek forgiveness

I traveled through time
And went through our space
I found that your love
Took over this place

Always expanding
Never outgrowing

I went through our time
I went through your space
What we have learned now
Lost upon your face

Always expanding
Never then shrinking
Speeding to your light
What was I thinking?

I can't go on this
Pain and the schism
Set our rift slightly
You are there nightly

I went back for you
You pushed me away
I sped to your light
And found yesterday

Lonely, I fixed you
In time and in space
Only I'd missed you
Still wanting your grace

Time is for our sins
To learn from the past
But now I'm not there
To make our love last

I sought intentions
I seek redemption
I know that you're from
Outer dimensions

I say this gently
I know you're not mine
You're all that is love
You're all that is kind

I caught back to you
And the past broke free
I showed you my love
What you've meant to me

Now we are happy
Intentions are proved
Slowly we take it
Our time can't be moved

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-05-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
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1 posted 2001-06-05 03:34 PM


woohoo! way to go Walt,really great poem i am going to see if ive missed any of yours

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Member Rara Avis
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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2001-06-05 03:43 PM


And they lived happily ever after!  Well done.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2001-06-05 04:10 PM


Very nice Walt...James
brian madden
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ireland
4 posted 2001-06-05 04:13 PM


I can't go on this
Pain and the schism
Set our rift slightly
You are there nightly


LOve is a strange thing enjoyed the read

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

jellybeans
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Posts 2298

5 posted 2001-06-05 04:36 PM


wow......enjoyed this...lots of deep thinking here...good to see the circle turning around at the ending  
Poeminister
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6 posted 2001-06-05 05:09 PM


Enjoyed this.  Nicely done.
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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7 posted 2001-06-05 06:22 PM


I really enjoyed this Walty  

Maree.

elisaseyes
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since 1999-07-15
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fort worth texas
8 posted 2001-06-05 07:53 PM


This was precious Walt.
cruz
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since 2000-07-18
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Dallas,Texas USA
9 posted 2001-06-12 02:24 PM


Hey Walt!
I couldnt let this one pass.  I think this is they type of poetry that stretches the readers imagination of reality.  I like the journeys in your mind and reading this one allows me deep thoughts of fascination.  I most enjoyed these lines:

Lonely, I fixed you
In time and in space
Only I'd missed you
Still wanting your grace

Very well done.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
10 posted 2001-06-12 02:45 PM


Great write here, Walt.  You shall receive the forgiveness you seek.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)
11 posted 2001-06-12 03:08 PM


thank you guys you and my wife keep me going
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