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In Future Hands [a collaboration]
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In Future Hands [a collaboration] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
In Future Hands ~*~ Upon the terraced slope she rests in dress of Irish Lace. The sun near setting, casts its glow on her young weeping face. She cannot have the man she wants, for he’s already wed. She pushes auburn hair from eyes, remembers words he said. “My love, my light, ah ‘tis not just forsake not this sweet kiss, devotion share, yes this we shall that both know poignant bliss.” She rendered to him that which she possessed to give, her all then left in haste, that she repent “Please God, forgive my fall.” Her swollen breasts and aching back spoke of his seed that grew. It’s shame she feels, the foolishness, and wondered if he knew. Such horrid names she now is called by friends and family. When babe shall come, she’ll move away, perhaps, across the sea. For all she would possess in time in love or future fame is wrapped up now in babe so fine that it have one's good name. She’ll have to lie, say husband died and start her life anew. As dusk descends and hides her tears, it’s all that she can do. ~*~ Auguste & Lady in White thank you for reading. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Bravo!! Wonderful poem you two! Love this....very well done...very smooth  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well done. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
A wonderful and touching piece from you two. Very nicely done. Poeminister |
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elizabeth anne Member
since 2001-03-29
Posts 83 |
I can see her.. very nice.. Elizabeth Anne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She cannot have the man she wants, for he’s already wed. She pushes auburn hair from eyes, remembers words he said. “My love, my light, ah ‘tis not just forsake not this sweet kiss, devotion share, yes this we shall that both know poignant bliss.” She rendered to him that which she possessed to give, her all then left in haste, that she repent “Please God, forgive my fall.” ============================ written with passion and compassion... very cool weave, a unique subject to write about... love the title... well done poetess Lady and poet sir she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lady and Michael..so sad and touching a write...Bravo to you both! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Beautiful flow - couldn't tell where each of you began or ended, good jobbers you two! ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~ |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
SEA - it was a wonderful collaboration, I have much to learn when working with an artist... Interloper, thank you... Poeminister, the "very nicely" is welcome... Elizabeth, that you see her is a fine remark, thank you.... JanetMarie...a title is just as important as the body of work it heads....thank you for sharing that with us.... Martie...thank YOU for reading.... Mysteria...therein lies the duet...not knowing where one begins or one ends...and I shall not give up the secret... Thank you Auguste, this was a true delight. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
SEA, That you like this so much, greatly pleases me. My co-writer is such a gift poet. Without her wonderful talents this poem would not have been possible. Thank you. Interloper, Thank you for coming by and reading. We both much appreciate it. Poeminister, Thanks and am happy you enjoyed this collaboration. Elizabeth Anne, Thank you. I was hoping you'd have a look at this co-write. Janet Marie, I love it when you say "very cool." It's interesting to see how a poem develops when two people are working on it. It starts and yet we've no idea of how it will end, or for that matter, exactly what the poem will be about until it gets moving. Lady In White is such a pleasure to work with. Thank you for your very nice comments.Martie, Sad, true, but the story is repeated over and over. Thank you, my friend. The "Bravo" is nice to hear. Mysteria, Yes, I do believe we make a pretty good team. Thank you, Sharon. Lady In White, it was such a pleasure working with you on this and I hope to do so again in the future. Thank you. Proust- |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely told.. an old tale revisited quite well... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Despite the such matter there is such a beautiful quality to the poem. Seamless writing the words flow as if from one pen. Loved it. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Cpat Hair, Welcome to our Passions family. I'll be looking for your posts. Thank you from both of us. Yes, truly and old tale revisited. Brian, What a very nice thing to say and thank you. She will be so pleased to read your kind comments. Proust- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The flow, the subject, the endearment, the subtle verses... easily highlight the success of your collaboration... please keep writing... regards to the both of you, Sudhir |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
 you 2 ROCK! |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This was a most wonderful collaboration...thank you all for reading! |
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