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eyesplus2
Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 163
australia

0 posted 2001-06-03 03:18 AM

                A Gift was given
                A gift was taken

                A star lit up the sky
                A star darkened with a cry

                A life began
                A life ended

                A angel came down from above
                A angel went to the sky above

                A gift for two
                to live evermore

                In our broken hearts

                      Forevermore........

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

1 posted 2001-06-03 08:56 AM

this is really sad eyes...

it seems like it is hiding a very specific thought - makes me asks questions...

hugs

K

It is to do with tree-ferns:
mamuka, pongo, wheki.
Shelter under here is so easily understood.
From 'Hope', by Dinah Hawkins

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2001-06-03 09:00 AM

Very tender and sorrowful Eyesplus2, you've captured a sadness that touches the heart, very nicely done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

3 posted 2001-06-03 11:30 AM

Heartbreaking write, eyesplus2...but you've done a great job of expressing it to us...great work...

sp

everytime I close my eyes,
I see your face,
I taste you on my lips...
every night I fantasize
that I can feel you on my fingertips...

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

4 posted 2001-06-03 01:58 PM

A Gift was given
                A gift was taken

                A star lit up the sky
                A star darkened with a cry

                A life began
                A life ended

                A angel came down from above
                A angel went to the sky above

                A gift for two
                to live evermore

                In our broken hearts

                      Forevermore........

=============================

Why do we feel the loneliness of a place more when someone used to oocupy it?

The darkness more when there was light before it.......

The loss more......

the emptiness more.......

Oh....such a touching true poem

Thank you
***************************

It's only me.......only me
I hope that would suffice eternally

{{to cross a sea of wonder, and hold close at heart all dreams}}

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-06-03 02:13 PM

Very sad, piece eyes. So much truth to it though. I wish you the best.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

confetti
Junior Member

since 2001-04-12

Posts 33

6 posted 2001-06-03 05:56 PM

This is very sad but I like the way you wrote it.

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-04 03:33 PM

Oh very sad...but a job well done!

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-06-06 07:03 AM

very haunting piece...i am left wondering about the identity of the "gift"...

i hope it is not what i think it is and i hope this isn't autobiographical...

HUGS..

i liked the format of your poem

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