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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
They skulk in shadow , shun the light foul creatures bent as evil plays . From corner of my eyes I see their scurried reptile slinking ways . I sense their hand in most mis-deeds , like finger-prints etched in my mind ., These are the ones of us gone bad they've turned into another kind . Temptation speaks to all of us and most succumb to some degree . A school-yard taunt from days gone past echoed refrain , leers mockingly . Not always proud of what's been done in truth it takes one to know one . |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Absolutely. And I like when you take yourself seriously!  loved the format--reads like a sonnet, but if it is? what type?YOU, Doc, are another that I study...smile, library time! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Doc, those lines below are so true, in favt the whole poem is but lets just say those two lines speak clearly to me. REally enjoyed the poem. A school-yard taunt from days gone past echoed refrain , leers mockingly . Not always proud of what's been done in truth it takes one to know one . "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Deep and profound. Takes pondering. Write on. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity , Almost reads like a sonnet ( I've gotten in trouble over that before ). Yes , three quatrains and a couplet , fourteen lines in iambic meter , however , I used tetrameter which I think disqualifies this one .I've found this to be an easy format for me to write in , but I'm not sure if it is a recognized one . Thanks Doc Brian , Thanks for the reply .Got to musing the other day about how I've given some people another chance, which reminded me of how many of those I've used myself . This was the end result . Thanks again Doc interloper , Stop on by anytime ( there , now that you've been invited , you're not really an interloper )Thanks for the read and reply . Doc |
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