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ethome
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0 posted 2001-06-02 03:12 PM


       Lonely, the sun appears
       to burn up the horizon
       The woodlands awake
       whispering to long golden fingers
       There the day grows upwards
       songs whistle and greet
       as aged tenants all stretch.

      
       A charred stand of perennial woodys      
       connects to the lush green.
       I'm speechless at the ravage
       of this exposed man made cemetery.
       I long for quick solutions
       a means sponsered by all aware of costs,
       a stretch of time,
       caught and held back for repair.

       I move my eyes
       from forest floor to burned soldiers
       cursing the poles
       left to grow out of the black.


       The birds,
       the moose,
       the bear,
       all souls,
       running, frightened
       until...
       The hot flames
       of the devil go dead,
       with scattered wildlife
       and blood
       at the end
       of a cigarette!


The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

[This message has been edited by ethome (edited 06-02-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Interloper
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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2001-06-02 03:15 PM


One more reason to stop smoking, eh what?
You painted an excellent black and white portrait.  Well done.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth


brian madden
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2 posted 2001-06-02 03:48 PM


I'm speechless at the ravage
       of this exposed man made cemetery.
       I long for quick solutions
       a means sponsered by all aware of costs,
       a stretch of time,
       caught and held back for repair.


      
Some dark well written imagery here Ethome,
Enjoyed the read.
I wonder which brand OLd Nick smokes?

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-06-02 03:58 PM


Excellent write Ethome ... intense and perfectly laid out. It's a horrible result of a momentary thoughtless gesture ... your outrage is very clear in this piece, and I echo your sentiments, well done.  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Logan
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4 posted 2001-06-02 03:59 PM


very nice, ethome. To any who have not seen nor fought such flames, you have left a wonderful (if that be the word)image so they could know
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2001-06-02 04:05 PM


Excellent writing...James
Martie
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6 posted 2001-06-02 04:13 PM


ethome..YOU are the one that writes with a poet's heart...your images in this are wonderful..it does hurt to see the pain that one careless act produces...thanks for this poem.
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7 posted 2001-06-02 04:24 PM


Outstanding portrayal here. Very well done, with a strong message, hopefully taken by many.
Sandra

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8 posted 2001-06-02 04:48 PM


superb my friend. . .

these images are excellent and you convey the thoughts perfectly. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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9 posted 2001-06-02 04:54 PM


ETHome~
Stunning deep imagery ...
As one who has recently been touched by the fates of fire ...
I appreciate this one tremendously.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com               

[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 06-02-2001).]

Watersign6
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10 posted 2001-06-02 06:48 PM


deep an intense,i enjoyed this  
Sunshine
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11 posted 2001-06-02 07:02 PM


Ethome, my poet friend...I put off reading this for emotional reasons...

even though it is not what I thought it might be about...

nevertheless, it is still emotional...

rarely do I say this....but....


damn....

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12 posted 2001-06-02 08:49 PM



       The hot flames
       of the devil go dead,
       with scattered wildlife
       and blood
       at the end
       of a cigarette!
===================================

SLAP!!! (the sound of the impact of reality)
vivid, stark, intense, and righteous.
may I ditto Suns superb superlative  
your so cool E-babes.

Im searchin for my warrior
walkin the tracks of time
this struggle to seek forgiveness
like chains and shackles...these ghosts of mine

Paula Finn
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13 posted 2001-06-03 01:51 AM


You are just outstanding...awesome write here darlin....
angelbear
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14 posted 2001-06-03 02:39 AM


Oh the power, pain, and devestation caused by addction....Great work.

I can't control
my destiny
I trust my soul,
my only goal
is just to "be"
-Lyrics from RENT

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15 posted 2001-06-03 02:54 AM


A an excellent write and certainly the time of year for this warning, such senseless loss and threat to our environment, it sickens me.  I share your disgust.

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~

EagleScorpion
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16 posted 2001-06-03 03:13 AM


I smoke about half a pack a day (give or take) and i am good friends with a hopeless addict of many things...
i feel this.. everytime i go in the backyard and have a ciggarette, i feel this

Mabel A. Dilley
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17 posted 2001-06-03 03:06 PM


One careless gesture and a forest burns. Good depth in writing this for us. Remind us always of safety.

"I am not now that which I have been."

ethome
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18 posted 2001-06-03 04:34 PM


Thank you Interloper. I guess it's a good reason to quit among others.

Thanks Brian I'm glad you could get the chance to read this!

Hi Kit always good to hear from you and you're right it is a momentary thoughtless geature.......thanks.

Logan if no one that reads this ever fights one of those fires they all will still feel the results of them....thanks!

Thanks James I appreciate the comment!

Martie thanks for the heart of a poet remark it sure means a lot to me.

Sven thanks for taking the time to read the message.

Catalinamoon I sure hope a strong message gets out to the world by whatever means possible....thanks!

Marge you know what the results are like after a devestating fire and it's not pretty...thanks Marge!

Watersign6 thank you for the kind words!

Sunshine I can imagine what you were thinking but I'm glad you dropped in to read and I thank you!

Janet my dear poet friend I thank you for all the intense adjectives and your reality comments!

Paula my dear sweet poet lady I thank you for your thoughts.

Angelbear I know what you mean and the addiction always seems to cause trouble one way or another......thanks!

Thank you Mysteria! I know that you know as well as I do that this is a terrible happening when a forest is destroyed!

EagleScorpion watch those lungs but if you are going to smoke keep the butts away from the tinder dry forests!   Thanks for the reply.

Yes Julian that's all it takes is a careless mistake and we lose thousands of acres of our enviroment!  Thanks for your thoughts.

JLR
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19 posted 2001-06-03 05:14 PM


Love the title...appreciated the message greatly!
ethome
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20 posted 2001-06-03 05:15 PM


Thanks for dropping in for the read JLR!
Cerenity
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21 posted 2001-06-03 10:25 PM


Hi Ethome,

Most powerful message in this master piece of poetry and the imagery superb,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



ethome
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22 posted 2001-06-04 04:28 AM


Thank you Cerenity for the kind comment I really appreciate it!
JCGF
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23 posted 2001-06-04 10:22 AM


Powerful!  This hit me like a ton of bricks!  Wow!  Great write.  Thankyou for the read.

Tammy

ethome
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24 posted 2001-06-04 12:23 PM


Tammy thank you for the wonderful positive comment, much appreciated!
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