Storm Chasing( by serenity)- companion to Comes The Rain

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Open Poetry #14

Storm Chasing( by serenity)- companion to Comes The Rain

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

0 posted 2001-06-02 03:18 AM

the sky is pregnant with the yearn
of birthing of a rain in burn
desire now fruition be
the part of you that fulfills me

CLOUDS

come whispering in wind
tendrils of a taunting friend
the wind she plays the tambourine
the player rattles leaves unseen...

DROPLETS

slowly sweetened sweat
the pattern of my love's regret
each drop familiarity
of love...it is my christening

THUNDER

Thor he raises voice
as if I ever had a choice
Roaring thoughts through alley's mind
in leave of my regrets behind.

LIGHTENING

Electricity
the spark of you
that sparks in me
all I am
I've yet to be...
to meet the best of you in me.

STORM

that breaches in the sky
the why in clash of wonder why
and with each beat of heart in break
my heart will weep in depth of grave

SilentSongs
Junior Member

since 2001-05-31

Posts 43
Mist of Time

1 posted 2001-06-02 04:39 AM

I do very much like the construction of this. The accentiation of chosen words adds greatly to the theme and impact thereof.

Thanks very much

"The past my prison, confined in solitary voiceless penance."

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2001-06-02 07:21 AM

Paula this is another great poem from you and I enjoyed it very much. The highlighted areas really enhance the meaning! Great work!

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