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Legacy of the Damned |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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*just venting a little about a situation someone close to me is going through ... ~*~ Legacy of the Damned Beneath the surface, deep within, Beyond the armor of the skin, An undercurrent seethes and cries, For those whom you have compromised. A legacy of dark despair, Consumes the lives you claim to share, A world you fostered from the start, Through lack of love, and hard of heart. Immune to reason, logic lost, While those around you pay the cost, Manipulations schemed and planned, Through words and actions of the damned. Oblivious to haunting trials, You sit in righteous, calm denial, Impervious, you hold no shame, Excuse yourself from want of blame. I wonder if you comprehend The lives you touch, the minds you bend, Though tears are dry, and long since wept, The scars remain … the memories kept. /Kit McCallum [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Kit~ I know a few who could stand to read this...such a shame that those that hurt others the most never seem to realize that they do...excellent writing Kit, you have captured the true essence of the selfish heart well..and all the pain they cause~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Your talent is really showing. This one is a keeper. Sy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Kit~ This is one I wish to keep ... May our words never cause the tears another weeps. This is so tenderly emotive. Thank you for sharing, sweet poetess. Your friend is fortunate, indeed.  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A legacy of dark despair, Consumes the lives you claim to share, ========================= I wonder if you comprehend The lives you touch, the minds you bend, Though tears are dry, and long since wept, The scars remain … the memories kept. =========================== Kit those above lines say it all for me... and you have written this with a powerful and haunting pen of reality. You've captured the anger and fear that comes from this kind of situation... and yes.....the scars remain long after the abuse ends. This one hits home for me, as I grew up in similar circumstance ... those your write of here have my empathy,and prayers. Outstanding emotive write Kit... look at all the emotion you've evoked from us... proof of a gifted pen. take care sweet poetess Kit-gator  jm I'm hanging on your every word |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You certainly went on to elaborate on the title. "Oblivious to haunting trials, You sit in righteous, calm denial, Impervious, you hold no shame, Excuse yourself from want of blame." This verse stuck in my mind. I love the cutting nature of these words, very descript and intense! Great writing my fellow Canuck! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Kit...James |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I know just what this is like......very painful memory...excellent writing Kit  SEA |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
excellent vent!!!! Kathleen Blake |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A legacy of dark despair, Consumes the lives you claim to share, A world you fostered from the start, Through lack of love, and hard of heart. Immune to reason, logic lost, While those around you pay the cost, Manipulations schemed and planned, Through words and actions of the damned. powerful and dark imagery. Enjoyed reading, Kit "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is an incredible piece Kit...and something I have given much thought to myself...into my library, loved the thought and the style deliciously dark! will come back later when I've more time! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sharply expressed. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Kit, Such amazing writing with perfect flow. Most excellent!! Michael Proust- |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
Kit,way to go you have captured everything so well here |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
From the first word of the title to the closing period, this is incredible writing of powerful emotions, Kit. The last verse is one that will haunt. *S* |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, you could be one of the greatest ventilators alive! This is very powerful and true to form... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Kit, you write far too little...but this one is a shining example of words written from your heart. Truly wonderful. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Butterflies, Sy, Marge, JM, Ethome, James, Susan, Kathleen, Brian, Serenity, Poeminister, Michael, Watersign, Suthern, Michael and Sharon ... Thank you so very much for all of your supportive and wonderful comments. It can indeed be a very frustrating situation for those who live through it, and thank you so much for letting me vent ... I'm very grateful to each of you for your kind comments. I also apologize that I'm sure I've missed many wonderful poems that I haven't been able to respond to over the last little while, and that I can't respond to everyone individually today. I promise to try to catch up as best as I can if my schedule lets up (hopefully soon). Much appreciation to all, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-02-2001).] |
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