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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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~for K~ Largos Your ariose voice is cabled and wears the sound of the sea Each thought arrives before you rebreathe the last whisper A seductress calling me from sleep with words gently disappearing into my fantasy reborn into a nautical dream where a musical ship must ferry your words to me in song No journey of ease in tranquil leisure a bond of harmony is formed with the shore There are no mermaids riding waves to kiss drowning sailors so hymns are offered to lighthouses that answer in steady bright beats Each note is a promise of hope that endures within each song as yet unwritten every dream left unscored I frown as I wonder if a deafened Beethoven was cursed with silent dreams or maybe in blessed sleep he found his salvation not in sawing legs from pianos but through walking meadows in the night accompanied by his pastoral sixth It's easy to dream with my eyes closed I can taste the distant winds that sweeten austere sails with a lingering scent freshly missed and unmistakably yours I can hear you calling me and should feel your breath It’s very absence awakens me to find your voice again cabled thickly whispering goodnights and regrets It is your time now to dream There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. byron [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jamie~ This is most sincerely tender ~ 'I can taste the distant winds that sweeten austere sails with a lingering scent freshly missed and unmistakably yours' She will love it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
calling me and should feel your breath It’s very absence awakens me Loved these lines. Makes all the sense in the world. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
~She does love it...  Jamie... 'There are no mermaids riding waves to kiss drowning sailors so hymns are offered to lighthouses that answer in steady bright beats' this speaks to me on poetic image alone...whereas this: 'I can hear you calling me and should feel your breath It’s very absence awakens me to find your voice again cabled thickly whispering goodnights and regrets It is your time now to dream' speaks to my heart. Thanks for today: 'Oh, I just love Tiffanies!' heh. Can't wait till the next time...and more, when it's 'properly' again.. Hugs sweetie...and thank you for this wonderful wonderful poem...  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: Your dangers are many. I Cannot look much but your form suffers Some strange injury Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your ariose voice is cabled and wears the sound of the sea Each thought arrives before you rebreathe the last whisper =============================== It's easy to dream with my eyes closed I can taste the distant winds that sweeten austere sails with a lingering scent freshly missed and unmistakably yours I can hear you calling me and should feel your breath It’s very absence awakens me =============================== my goodness this is enchanting!! such beautiful imagery and superb employ of metaphor and comparisons to the sea to define the longing and emotions. Miss K, has again inspired magic from your pen... (and look Kam, no cliches')  excellent write Jamie, touching and tender. jm I'm hanging on your every word |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It really is a beautiful dreamsong you have written! I wonder if he was cursed with silent dreams??? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I am very impressed with this write. Kathleen Blake |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply lovely!!!!  |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Forgot to add this to my library! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamie..This makes me catch my breath with the expression of love you have written...very beautiful!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh that truly kindles old memories for me, what a beautiful love poem. Think I will go open that box and read them over again now! ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Marge - Thanks, and I think you were right. inot2b - Thanks for that, I seldom make any sense at all lately..lol K - Since the poem was about you speaking does the fact that it speaks to you make it parodoxical or does it mean you are talking to yourself?---heh.... Thanks for the song dear  JM -  Thank you for being one who can be enchanted... glad you like it.ethome - Thanks, (and I wonder if their is a painting of him lying on the floor with a legless piano?..hmmm) Kathleen - Gee, Impressed?..Thanks!! Sharon - I am glad to contribute something that one such as yourself ( with such a wonderful heart) thinks is lovely. Thanks so very much dear. Martie - I am well versed in dealing with people having difficulty breathing...let me know if you require assistance..  ps.. thanks for liking it...Mysteria - Thanks for thinking so.. have fun reading ( but don't forget to make the kleenex handy first).. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Heh...I think it's just cancelled itself out... ~grins~  K |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oooh I see changes ..... Like I said Jamie Dear, this is really lovely Love, sighhhh, isn't it wonderful! Beautifully written Maree |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
K - More like redoubled...heh MM - ...and so are you dear!!! There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
...we never did get around to watching the sound of music did we? |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
No, but we will - via the phone lol. Soon - in about a week...after my essay. Shall we? I still say this is the best one you have written, and I say it without bias my dear friend. K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
We shall. hmm-- i thought it was reverie-- or polarised |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
don't know about polarisation in regard to Julie Andrews, but i do know that you can find some interesting pieces here and there. not your best (though there may be personal reasons for that, admitted ) but not too far off. i like your eclectic use of language in this, as it fits the subject pretty well. tres cool J, glad to see this one that i missed, you write far too rarely to suit me.C |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I love musical dreams. Here's one incarnate and inchoate. She said burn ... together. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Searching for A Moment tonight...found this on the way... Time moves fast doesn't it dear K[This message has been edited by Severn (01-18-2003 05:43 AM).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
unbelievably so tigger |
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