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Open Poetry #14

Inside of me

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

0 posted 2001-06-05 02:02 PM

My knees tremble,
when we kiss.
I cannot admit the power you have over me.
Enamoured of your touch,
I tremble yet again,
when our skin meet.
Dangerously,
fearfully,
I give you all of me.
Swallowing your love,
drop by drop.
Hoping to keep,
a little piece inside me.

[This message has been edited by walker (edited 06-05-2001).]

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

1 posted 2001-06-05 02:09 PM

Such intensity...such love. Well done!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2001-06-05 02:30 PM

(sigh) Whew, getting warm in here! (smiles) Such a gorgeous, sexy, passionate poem of pure love! This poem made me wish I could feel this kind of love with my dream! (smiles) You are everything in her and she is everything in you! (smiles) Another beautiful poem from your beautiful heart! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Deafheaven
Junior Member

since 2001-06-02

Posts 23
Sudbury, Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2001-06-05 02:35 PM

Nicely done but Iwould suggest the final line read simply "a little piece inside me"

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

4 posted 2001-06-05 02:54 PM

Beautiful, and sensual, very nice.

Poeminister

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-06-06 08:10 AM

This was so beautifully written!!! Great job

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