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Corinne
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state of confusion

0 posted 2001-05-31 08:42 PM


Illusive Reasoning

In slow, painful steps,
I attempt to capture
images of life
by means of quill
and ink.
Every expression,
each line is a struggle,
a search for the unexpected
to replace my dull
orientation.

I write nearly every day,
on lunch breaks,
in the evenings
while the kids play
(and fight),
after they’ve gone to bed
if I have can keep from
falling asleep
mid-sentence.

I’m aware of fragmented
phrasing,
and thoughts twisted
into awkward order,
as if synapses
are falling short
of connection.

In my estimation,
something isn’t quite right
in my brain,
maybe my mother
dieted too much
when she was pregnant,
or maybe I did things
when I was younger
that depleted gray matter,
but the resulting gridlock
appears permanent.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey


© Copyright 2001 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2001-05-31 08:49 PM


Corinne - and you do the writing very well.

BC

Joyce Johnson
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2 posted 2001-05-31 08:51 PM


We all have those days, but it's perfectly apparent from this poem that you haven't lost it.  Joyce
deepblue
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3 posted 2001-05-31 09:44 PM


hi cor,
wow, a new twist on on writing about not writing, i love it.  I can really identify with this, especially the part about the kids. Oh, and there is definately nothing wrong with your grey matter.

Logan
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4 posted 2001-05-31 11:33 PM


Noone that makes music with your words as you do, is a dullard...grin..you are just so good, girldear...gentle smile
Krawdad
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5 posted 2001-06-01 12:35 PM


Oh I don't think so, Corinne.
And pay attention to "something isn't quite right in my brain".
Perhaps that is your source.
Keep writing, it is your answer.

Temptress
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6 posted 2001-06-01 01:33 AM


Cor,
You convey a frustration here if I'm catchig it correctly. Enjoyed. You do this well, I agree.

RMW
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7 posted 2001-06-01 11:05 AM


Cor....

Come bend a comma on the wind,
And in the pause
Begin again
That passage youth once longed to make.
Tack!
Come about!
There are not ruts here on the lake.

I agree with Temptress. You've captured frustration wonderfully. Bob

Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-06-01 11:07 AM


I'll never stop writing either, and I identified with every word...we just keep writing and typing and loving it!
    

brian madden
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9 posted 2001-06-01 03:37 PM


Every expression,
each line is a struggle,
a search for the unexpected
to replace my dull
orientation.


Corrine, i find this very hard to believe.
THough I know about feeling the lack of grey matter and as far I can see you have no worries in that department. enjoyed the read

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

Corinne
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state of confusion
10 posted 2001-06-01 04:13 PM


Thank you all for your kind words. I always feel safe posting all of my work here, good and bad, because I know the people in this forum are focused on encouraging others rather than taking them down.

I suppose I'm having an attack of "why bother?" When I don't feel as though I am progressing...

Thanks again, means a lot to me.

Corinne

OLIAS
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11 posted 2001-06-01 07:13 PM


I think this why bother mood is your inspiration, you have managed to create a great write from it and I enjoyed it very much.

Regards,
Olias.

Martie
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12 posted 2001-06-01 08:52 PM


Corinne--I was feeling just this way today..and still am.  You express it so well and I always enjoy your poetry, as I did this one.
Parker
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13 posted 2001-06-01 09:18 PM


I like your grey matter, it sure keeps me thinking.   Another great write.

Park

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14 posted 2001-06-01 09:46 PM


Corinne~

'I suppose I'm having an attack of "why bother?" When I don't feel as though I am progressing...'

Do me a favor, will you ?
Continue to  'B O T H E R'  me !
Your gray matter is intact ... and G R O W I N G !

*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                               noles1@totcon.com             

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