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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-05-31 08:32 PM

Contact me when the day is over
as I slip into my waves
that flow over my brow
with urgency not seen for days.
Let me lay upon the glass
that broke our hearts for love
and left me scattered in the sun
forgetting who I was to become.
Under the dust of magazines
that clutter the house away
let me find my pen and pad
to start to write again.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2001-05-31 09:09 PM

Michael - keep writing like this, and I'll keep reading. Nicely written....

BC

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-31 09:25 PM

Let me lay upon the glass
that broke our hearts for love
and left me scattered in the sun
forgetting who I was to become.
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let me find my pen and pad
to start to write again.
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yes lord...please do...
never lose that pen.
this is classic MG poetry...and thats a very good thing.

I'm hanging on your every word
Even if you dont want to speak tonite
It's alright
I'm sitting outside heaven's door
listening to you breathe

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

3 posted 2001-05-31 09:51 PM

excellent Michael

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-06-02 02:42 PM

oh, wow! This is fantastically said, succinct yet a panorama of images.

I'm not certain whether the glass in your poem is window/figure/or mirror, but as I read I saw fragments of mirror lying on the floor and reflections of broken pieces of the hurting-one's image strewn across the 'page of loss'

I feel like I must write something with that as the focal point. How would you feel about that? Please e-mail me your response with a copy of this and your poem, to help me clearly understand your comment. I'm old and sometimes forgetful of details. Well, okay, I'm not really old, only 56, but I'm sometimes scatter-brained, more often each year.

[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 06-02-2001).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2001-06-02 03:35 PM

Yes, write and write some more. We are hear to read and "listen."

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2001-06-02 04:13 PM

Michael, this is very good, and full of emotion. Much enjoyed. Write on!
Sandra

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

7 posted 2001-06-03 10:14 PM

Your pad and pen are your and ours, best asset...

Your time is coming very soon...

Love,
Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

8 posted 2001-06-06 09:53 PM

Michael,

Never stop writing.. not only for the selfish reason that I love to read your poems.. but writing is in you.. you stop writing.. you deny yourself a very important part of you.

TaraB

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