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Poeminister
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Regina SK; Canada

0 posted 2001-05-31 12:56 PM


Fate


Fate tries to put all in one straight
but Humans obscure deviate
beyond the edge of his Force,
in a Thought plagued course
that boils Nature- makes her steam,
and spill over ready to scream
though finding himself by these purblind,
he still will come through the wind
galloping, following falling Chance,
upon a steed, and bearing lance
he rides beseen in dark shadows
toward all today's tommorows-
the future's future from past kind
coming full apace from behind,
eventually to give back from what is gave
and with nothing does nothing save
in furious force charging too fast
his weapon pressed will be to-brast
but charge tamed, modestly paced
will grace faster find than haste
then he'll 'light, and weild a holy glaive
and smite for right in hunger brave
and make meeds merited
for good deeds deliver'd
Fate is naturally knight and nurse
that we in habit bless or curse

[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 05-31-2001).]

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theLadypoet
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since 2001-05-28
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1 posted 2001-05-31 01:00 PM


Lovely Camelot feel.

theLadypoet

"A woman is like a tea bag, you never know how strong she is until she gets in hot water..." Eleanor Rooevelt

SEA
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2 posted 2001-05-31 01:05 PM


the flow and feel of this is wonderful! I enjoyed this very much and am saving it in my library!    ~SEA
Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-05-31 01:54 PM


ah, fate,. yes, enjoyed this very much

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Poeminister
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4 posted 2001-05-31 02:26 PM


theladypoet--thank you for stopping by and commenting.

SEA--Thank you.  Glad enjoyed the read.

Irish Rose--Thanks for reading and enjoying.

[This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 05-31-2001).]

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
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5 posted 2001-05-31 03:34 PM


quote:
he still will come through the wind
galloping, following falling Chance,
upon a steed, and bearing lance
he rides beseen in dark shadows
toward all today's tomorrows



indeed, to come through the wind...
toward the quest...

well done!

Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17
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6 posted 2001-06-01 12:56 PM


Melodic and fanciful. Enjoyed greatly.

"I am not now that which I have been."

JCGF
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since 2001-01-19
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7 posted 2001-06-01 12:56 PM


Whenever I forget the definiton of fate, I know where to go, right here.  Excellent!  Thankyou for the read.

Tammy

Sven
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8 posted 2001-06-01 01:00 PM


well done. . . well done. . .

I love the feel and the flow of this. . . like a tale of olde. . . excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
9 posted 2001-06-01 01:04 PM


"
                but charge tamed, modestly paced
                will grace faster find than haste
                then he'll 'light, and weild a holy glaive
                and smite for right in hunger brave
                and make meeds merited
                for good deeds deliver'd
                Fate is naturally knight and nurse
                that we in habit bless or curse"

So true and so well written!!

Interloper
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Deep in the heart
10 posted 2001-06-01 01:17 PM


Fickle fate.  Well done.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
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11 posted 2001-06-01 01:21 PM


'Fate is naturally knight and nurse
that we in habit bless or curse'

You are so right there, so well written

Titia

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Cerenity
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Escondido-California
12 posted 2001-06-02 09:11 AM


Hi Poeminister,

What a thought provoking read, and with vived imargery as well, this must be put in my works of art folder thank you the prize piece,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
13 posted 2001-06-06 07:24 AM


WOW! do you know how to write with that pen of yours or what,this is great!  
Mote
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since 2000-05-24
Posts 31

14 posted 2001-06-06 03:45 PM


Ooops.  Loved this  

[This message has been edited by Mote (edited 06-06-2001).]

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada
15 posted 2001-06-06 03:59 PM


Decaflame--Thank you so much for stopping by to read and for your kind comments.

Julian Lester--Thank you.  I'm glad you enjoyed this.

JCGF   Thank you  

Sven--I'm happy to know you liked this...thank you  

ethome--Thank you always for your kind words.

Interloper--Glad you could stop by and that you enjoyed the read.

Titia--Thank you  

Cerenity -Glad to know you enjoyed.  Thank you for your comments.

Watersign6-Thank you for your compliments.

Mote--Thank you  

Thank you all again for responding.

take care,
Poeminister

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