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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-05-31 07:56 AM

Would You, Please..

Would you recognize me
through the tears,
that myst and cloak my world?

Would you see beneath
the coverings, the heart
that's tightly furled?

Would you see behind
the wall of grief,
that hides the soft within

To recognize,
in darkness of,
this life, I've settled in?

Could you hold me
in the warmth of words
to calm, caress, the fear?

In shadows, could I
reach your touch
and know that you are near?

Would you recognize me
if I smiled, when thoughts
of you unfold?

Would you allow this, please
each morning's rise
this pleasure, mine to hold...

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2001-05-31 08:06 AM

If the person you had in mind doesn't say yes, they are just insane!! This is absolutely beautiful and tender...loved it!!

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2001-05-31 08:13 AM

Wynter~

'Would you recognize me
if I smiled, when thoughts
of you unfold?'

I would ..... and I do !
Lovely thoughts, sweet poetess.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 2001-05-31 08:56 AM

Wynter...this is just lovely

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2001-05-31 09:36 AM

Maureen, I see the softness in your words, and appreciate you!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2001-05-31 10:30 AM

i love this wynter..love the form too..nicely done my friend.

~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2001-05-31 10:37 AM

You write such tender sadness Wynter. You do it with such beauty!

"Would you recognize me
if I smiled, when thoughts
of you unfold?"

I just can't get over the meaning one can get out of that!

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2001-05-31 10:48 AM

This is truely one of the best poems of yours I've read so far

Loved it

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2001-05-31 08:58 PM

Wynter - you know the answer to all of this..

BC

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2001-05-31 09:11 PM

This is so beautiful...you have such a way of flowing rhyme and pattern and yet it never gets in the way of what you're saying with your words. Wonderful!!!

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

10 posted 2001-05-31 09:18 PM

Lovely peice. And I like the rhyme scheme you chose. Excellent writing.

Poeminister

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

11 posted 2001-05-31 09:24 PM

I feel a wealth of sincerity and longing in this, Wynter, which makes it excellent....

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

12 posted 2001-05-31 09:30 PM

Thank you Sunnyone...it was sweet of you to say so...I had a very upsetting morning and for some reason this came pouring out. It isn't my usual style, but sometimes you have to just let it flow.

Thank you Marge ....my naked thoughts
unfolded easily this morning.

hoot_owl_rn
I am glad you enjoyed my words today. Thank you for responding

Kathleen,
I know you do and I thank you for  your constant support huggsssss

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

13 posted 2001-05-31 09:41 PM

V~ am sending you an icq..thank you for always  hearing me out *s...

E...
I'm always happy to know you have read my words..thanks  huggsssss

M ..and yes I  wrote that  sentence to have  a deep and special meaning.

vandana, I am not sure this is one of my best poems  ever...but for today it satisfied a need in me..thank you.

BC - you are so sweet...what more can I say ~Smiles~

VAS
I have always prided myself that rhyme and rhythm come naturally to me...and in many forms ...so when it begins to flow, I let it alone. I can always write it in another form  but the first is the best for me.Thank You

Poeminister, thank you for reading and responding

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

14 posted 2001-06-01 05:02 AM

Thank you for giving me the pleasure of your reading my words....

~Wynter

....

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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