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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression

0 posted 2001-05-30 05:52 AM


Lingerings Light
~
As I moved away silent,
Thoughts linger,
Of how just moments were spent,
Still caught in the fragrances
Smells linger,
With memory in trances,
Rapture of time now gone by,
Lingering,
All expelled with a soft sigh,
My thoughts drifts to my pillow,
Lingering,
Slight awake in the shadow.
I linger.
~
Lingerings Dark
~
To sleep I drop poorly spent,
Dreams linger,
In familiar nightmares bent,
Perhaps wake to piercing lance,
Screams linger,
Visions slowly end their dance,
Gray reality covers dark,
Lingering,
At the edge of the grim stark,
To let the thoughts go again,
Lingering,
Before the sweeping of pain.
I linger.

Gloom


© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2001-05-30 08:11 AM


Lingerings, Light or Dark

In moments of one, shadow spent
lingering
Silent thoughts speak to me
Caught up in time...

The dark has a way, to lighten
the heart
Dancing in memories
This morning in rhyme...

Familiar the longings, the glimpse
of the moon
Mysted, to cover,
Protect from all fear...

Reigning reality, the edges,
of touching
Blue shades enlighten
as thoughts linger near...

M

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25
Posts 823
Hurricane,WV
2 posted 2001-05-30 10:58 AM


i really enjoyed your poem,thank you  
Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression
3 posted 2001-05-30 02:34 PM


Thank you, nakdthoughts,
Your poetically framed response
Is most appreciated.

Thank you, Watersign6
Glad you liked it
And took the time to respond.

Gloom

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2001-05-31 04:13 AM


Prof - this is beautifully crafted...you've worded it very well...

thanks for the read...

K

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2001-05-31 04:36 AM


I like the depth of pain portrayed in this poem. It takes good writing to accomplish that....I liked these lines...

"With memory in trances,
Rapture of time now gone by,"

Good write!

Death
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since 2001-05-26
Posts 112
Twilight
6 posted 2001-05-31 04:43 AM


As the night doth weep
with and within you so
does it offer that hope
interlude of sleeps balm soul

Very much like the duality. And your words reach out to touch the reader.

Well done.

I have a friend who once said-"Sooner or later, Death makes a believer out of just about everyone."

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
7 posted 2001-05-31 05:56 AM


Thank you, Severn,
Glad you liked it,
It’s the advantage of an established form,
The crafting.

Thank you, Ethome,
This is actually a pair of poems,
To show the duality, I am pleased a bit of them
Could please you.

Thank you, Death,
Always nice to be touching.

Gloom

ArticulatedSigh
Junior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 26

8 posted 2001-05-31 06:17 AM


Nicely woven, personal yet very comprehendable.

Gloom and Death on one page. That is some pair to face.

But what is in a name anyway?

Thanks for the read

For the moment swallows all things blinding our eyes to Heaven.

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