navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #14 » Canoe in the Reeds
Open Poetry #14
Post A Reply Post New Topic Canoe in the Reeds Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424


0 posted 2001-05-29 09:32 PM


Canoe in the Reeds

This
Slender craft.
And reminiscent
Of my youth
Confined so anxiously within the reeds.
Then,
Vertically my thoughts reclined
With inner strokes
That caught my breath
Persuasively
As when this tender curtain
Traps
Heat.

RMW

© Copyright 2001 RMW - All Rights Reserved
Interloper
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369
Deep in the heart
1 posted 2001-05-29 10:08 PM


Please explain,  I got a case of the dumbs, Bob.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.


Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
2 posted 2001-05-29 11:43 PM


Bob...your poetry does leave one wondering...I am thinking of my 57 chevy and the back seat...but I could be wrong.  Enjoy the thought of it.
VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
3 posted 2001-05-29 11:49 PM


I'm so literal, Bob, that I'm only seeing what is stated.  It seems others think it's only symbols of its true meaning/intent.  Trying to discern something else...I feel way off target, so will keep my face rather than reveal it.
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2001-05-30 04:35 AM


Unlike VAS, I see only the metaphor...lol..well you have intrigued us with this - will you tell us how you yourself saw this as you wrote it?

It's great..

K

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
5 posted 2001-05-30 08:39 AM


I'm not even going to ask, but set myself along the imagining of these lines, and bask in that warmth...

well done, Sir....

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2001-05-30 09:29 AM


Nice trip Bob and a write that you can almost feel.......

"As when this tender curtain
                Traps
                Heat."

Oh yes just fab on the senses!

RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

7 posted 2001-05-30 09:57 AM


Morning folks....smiling...(there is safety in the numbers of a common reply). You know, I may know even less about the "intended" direction of "Canoe in the Reeds" than all of you; truly. Perhaps I'll be forgiven if this "explanation"....."runneth a bit over". Hmmmm. Severn may appreciate this: I first read "Guadalcanal Diary" when I was eight; not a particularly romantic book, or age; but it's a hot, breathy place, with areas of very tall grass, I hear. I've been to Rarotonga and Tahiti. Not that they seem to have much to do with this, though they are intensely beautiful. High School, for me, meant all boys (100 of us studying Latin and German and theology and other such subjects one would expect to find in a pre-ministerial prep-school ....as a young boy it was my privilege to chat briefly with a Navy Chaplain who was with the First Marine Division at the Chosin Resevoir...why the "Frozen Chosin" should come to mind escapes me ... smiles to Interloper).... on a campus (and hallways) shared with a co-educational junior college. I've always been fascinated by canoes...(but have yet to read that Freud shared that interest)....and I've always loved that old Bogart and Hepburn classic...."The African Queen"...you know, where the two of them find romance in a trip down the Ulanga, where they end up, or nearly so, trapped in the reeds. And I know that a canoe paddles most easily with someone in the bow and someone in the stern...though a craft designed for solo can be kept reasonalby well on track my means of what is called a "J Stroke". Beyond the above, your guess is as good as mine. But thank you all, really. Bob
Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

8 posted 2001-05-31 04:16 AM


Why thank you Bob...you know - I still see only the metaphor, proof yet again that poetry truly is subjective...

cheers

K

Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

9 posted 2001-06-13 02:31 PM


Straight back
and then the "J"
moving forward
with each
long stroke
I read your words



Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #14 » Canoe in the Reeds

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary